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Sports and games are important part of life

Sports and games are important part of life GLPlm

Sports helps in development of physical and mental health of the body. Through participation in sports activities we can gain experience, confidence and learn various skills that are helpful in developing our personality. Furthermore it enhances the focus and concentration of an individual to perform any task successfully. It also builds leadership qualities, sportsmanship spirits and surges the maintenance of social relationships and commitments as well. It makes life easy as it teaches us how to deal with problems and overcome them.

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IELTS essay Sports and games are important part of life

Essay

American English

1 paragraphs

82 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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