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In general,   hobbies are considered to be individual aspects. It varies based on individual activity and the social effects on their views and choices. A hobby can be anything which tends to make someone happy. In my view, hobbies do not need to be difficult proportion to enjoy. Knowing how to fill your evenings or weekends can be challenging. Picking a new hobby can be daunting at first especially when you have a lot going on already. Your hobbies may have become neglected over the years as you try to find a work-life balance. A hobby gives you time to relax, which can, in turn, reduce your stress level. A physical one involves exercise that will release endorphins to boost your mood and mental faculties. It can also help you find new skills and uncover hidden talents. Being active and playing sports can help with your physical health and well being while helping to burn energy. With more sleep and less stress,  you’ll find happiness in a sport or activity. These are the reasons let me thinking about starting to play a new sport which is really important for my mental, emotional,   physical health. I was thinking about what kind of sport I could commit to and enjoy for the rest of my life without ever getting bored. Dancing was the best choice for that. I have been interested in dancing for a long time. Therefore, I have taken up this sport recently. Previously, I thought most kinds of exercises needed to master their difficult technique to reduce the risk of injury during exercises, So I have to get a gym membership and do my exercise Performing exercises under the supervision of the coach. This idea get me away from sports for a long time. but I found dancing is completely different, It doesn't need all of that. One of the greatest things about dance is that anyone can participate. If you’re able to move, even if it’s only your upper body, you can dance. This what makes dance so popular with people who typically shy away from other forms of exercise. I don’t need a gym membership,  I can do it in my home without any equipment. There are plenty of free workouts on YouTube, I know a lot of coaches on YouTube that I would enjoy dancing with them. I'm going to buy sport outfits to motivate me and doesn't hinder my movements. I believe that dancing will help me to improve my fitness level, muscle tone and developing my balance and flexibility. also it gives me a mood boost and better night’s sleep. In Conclusion If you’re thinking about maybe trying dancing, DO IT! It’s great for your physical, mental, and cognitive health, plus you may just love it. On top of all of those benefits, you might even meet a new friend or two in the process.
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hobbies
are considered
to be individual aspects. It varies based on individual activity and the social effects on their views and choices. A
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hobby
can be anything which tends to
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make
someone happy. In my view,
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hobbies
do not need to be difficult proportion to enjoy.

Knowing how to fill your evenings or weekends can be challenging. Picking a
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new
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hobby
can be daunting at
first
especially
when you have
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a lot going
on already. Your
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hobbies
may have become neglected over the years as you try to find a work-life balance.

A
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hobby
gives you time to relax, which can, in turn,
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reduce
your
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stress
level. A
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physical
one involves
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exercise
that will release endorphins to boost your mood and mental faculties. It can
also
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help
you find
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new
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skills
and uncover hidden talents.

Being active and playing
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sports
can
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help
with your
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physical
health and
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well being
while helping to burn energy.

With more sleep and less
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stress
,
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you’ll find happiness in a
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sport
or activity.

These are the reasons
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let
me thinking about starting to play a
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new
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sport
which is
really
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important
for my mental, emotional,
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physical
health.

I was thinking about what kind of
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sport
I could commit to and enjoy for the rest of my life without ever getting bored.

Dancing was the best choice for that.

I have
been interested
in
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dancing
for a long time.
Therefore
, I have taken up this
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sport
recently.

Previously, I
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thought
most kinds of
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exercises
needed to master their difficult technique to
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reduce
the
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risk
of injury during
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exercises
,
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So
I
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have to
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get
a gym membership and do my
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Performing
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under the supervision of the coach. This
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idea
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get
me away from
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sports
for a long time.

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but
I found
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dancing
is completely
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, It doesn't need all of that.

One of the greatest things about dance is that anyone can participate. If you’re able to
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move
, even if it’s
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only
your upper body, you can dance.

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makes
dance
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so
popular with
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people
who
typically
shy away from other forms of exercise.

I don’t need a gym membership,
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I can do it in my home without any equipment.

There are
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of free workouts on YouTube, I know
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coaches on YouTube that I would enjoy
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dancing
with them.

I'm going to
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sport
outfits to motivate me and doesn't hinder my movements.

I believe that
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dancing
will
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help
me to
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improve
my fitness level, muscle tone and developing my balance and flexibility.
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also
it gives me a mood boost and better night’s sleep.

In Conclusion


If you’re thinking about maybe trying
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dancing
, DO IT! It’s great for your
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physical
, mental, and cognitive health, plus you may
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just
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love
it. On top of all of those benefits, you might even
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meet
a
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new
friend or two in the process.
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IELTS essay Sport you would like to learn

Essay
  American English
19 paragraphs
483 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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