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Educational institution system

Educational institution system 70nJA
I completely agree with the opinion that educational institution can take an initiative to teach every student about parenting. From the very beginning of our life, school help us to shape our characteristics, and it has a greater impact on the future life of every human. Although good parenting depends on few factors and most of them are learned by the other family member, but nowadays parents are very busy working. They don't have enough time to manage quality time for their children which will help the children to be a good parent. Here comes the role of the educational institution where they spend most of their time. If we include this to the curriculum, they must follow few rules and regulations. This will help them to understand how good behavior can uplift someone from one position to another. People should have few skills to be a good parent that includes good manners, decision making, overcome critical time, and handle their kids with proper care. All these can be learned from schools. Some people will disagree with this point by giving genetic example that has an important role but as I've already mentioned that, everything can be reshaped by practicing in a good way. In conclusion, I believe there might be issues with family learning which can be overcome from the basic educational experience. While consider the low income people, they don’t have enough educational quality to teach this sort of thing to their children. Here a school can help those to change their situation. I strongly believe that every educational institution should include this to the curriculum for future good.
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institution can take an initiative to teach every student about parenting. From the
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beginning of our life, school
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help
us to shape our characteristics, and it has a greater impact on the future life of every human.

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good
parenting depends on few factors and most of them
are learned
by the other family member,
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but
nowadays parents are
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busy working. They don't have
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enough
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time
to manage quality
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time
for their children which will
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help
the children to be a
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good
parent. Here
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comes
the role of the
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educational
institution where they spend most of their
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time
. If we include this to the curriculum, they
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must
follow few
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rules
and regulations. This will
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help
them to understand how
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good
behavior can uplift someone from one position to another.

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should have few
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skills
to be a
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good
parent that includes
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good
manners,
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decision making
, overcome critical
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time
, and handle their kids with proper care. All these can
be learned
from schools.
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Some
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people
will disagree with this point by giving genetic example that has an
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important
role
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but
as I've already mentioned that, everything can
be reshaped
by practicing in a
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good
way.

In conclusion
, I believe there might be issues with family learning which can
be overcome
from the basic
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educational
experience. While consider the low income
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people
, they don’t have
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enough
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educational
quality to teach this sort of thing to their children. Here a school can
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help
those to
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change
their situation. I
strongly
believe that every
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educational
institution should include this to the curriculum for future
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good
.
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IELTS essay Educational institution system

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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