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sport is turning a bussiness

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In recent years, commercialization has become a part of sport. While this has disadvantages, the advantages can outweigh these. Some people believe that the business of sport enables athletes to be financially secure, especially famous athletes. Furthermore, turning sport into a business effectively supports the marketing of companies. Nevertheless, commercialization can ruin the primary value of sport. This inadvertently creates pressure on athletes to become a winner, even leading to cheating in competition. In addition, sport business also cause the glambling and corruption in competition. To minimize the disadvantages of sport commercialization, the authority should impose strict laws and policies.
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enables athletes to be
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into a business
effectively
supports the marketing of
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companies
.
Nevertheless
, commercialization can ruin the primary value of
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sport
. This
inadvertently
creates pressure on athletes to become a winner, even leading to cheating in competition.
In addition
,
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sport
business
also
cause the
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glambling
and corruption in competition. To minimize the disadvantages of
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commercialization, the authority should impose strict laws and policies.
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IELTS essay sport is turning a bussiness

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  American English
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100 words
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