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Nowadays, more and more professionals from underdeveloped or developing countries are choosing to live and work in richer countries.

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Nowadays, more and more professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. There are many reasons given to explain this problem. Firstly, professionals are leaving their underdeveloped native countries because they do not have adequate opportunities there. Second, poor countries do not adequately provide modern technological equipment to serve their study, work, and research needs. Additionally, the salary and benefits in developed countries are really attractive. Thus professionals can devote themselves to work and research without worrying about money problems. A shortage of learners in science fields can result in some negative effects. The first impact: These professionals often have the skills and ideas to significantly boost the economy, which is important to improve the standard of living of its residents. The loss of these workers is why developed countries keep improving while the poorer countries remain stagnant. The second impact: migration of skilled professionals from underdeveloped or developing countries creates problems such as skills shortage and economic instability in their native countries. Additionally, the lack of needed personnel is also an important problem. For example, in many developing countries, hospitals and schools are often understaffed, causing a decline in services. However, there are various solutions to these problems such as offering a better salary and better living conditions. Firstly, this can be improved by increasing wages and investing in equipment and training to tempt doctors and teachers to continue working there Secondly, The government of these countries can spend their budget to improve the standard of living of their citizens by borrowing funds from external banks. Finally, the governments should launch special schemes and employment opportunities for the educated and aspiring youth. In conclusion, poorer countries are unable to develop due to the brain–drain. This can only be solved when the government offers better conditions to retain talent. The public and private sectors need to work together to mitigate this problem before it is too late.
Nowadays, more and more
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professionals
, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their
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poorer
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to
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work
in
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developed countries
.

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Firstly
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professionals
are leaving their underdeveloped native
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countries
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because
they do not have adequate opportunities there.

Second, poor
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countries
do not
adequately
provide modern technological equipment to serve their study,
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work
, and research needs.

Additionally
, the salary and benefits in developed
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countries
are
really
attractive.
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Thus
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professionals
can devote themselves to
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work
and research without worrying about money problems.

A shortage of learners in science fields can result in
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some
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effects.

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first
impact: These
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professionals
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often
have the
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skills
and
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ideas
to
significantly
boost the economy, which is
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important
to
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the standard of living of its residents. The loss of these workers is why developed
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countries
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keep
improving while the poorer
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remain stagnant.

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The
second impact: migration of skilled
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professionals
from underdeveloped or developing
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countries
creates
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problems
such as
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skills
shortage and economic instability in their native countries.

Additionally
, the lack of needed personnel is
also
an
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important
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problem
.
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, in
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many
developing
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countries
, hospitals and schools are
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often
understaffed, causing a decline in services.

However
, there are various solutions to these
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problems
such as offering a better salary and better living conditions.

Firstly
, this can be
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improved
by increasing wages and investing in equipment and training
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to tempt
doctors and teachers to continue working there

Secondly
, The
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government
of these
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countries
can spend their budget to
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improve
the standard of living of their citizens by borrowing funds from external banks.

Finally
, the
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governments
should launch special schemes and employment opportunities for the educated and aspiring youth.

In conclusion
, poorer
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countries
are unable to develop due to the brain–drain. This can
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only
be solved
when the
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government
offers better conditions to retain talent. The public and private sectors need to
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work
together to mitigate this
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problem
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before
it is too late.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more professionals from underdeveloped or developing countries are choosing to live and work in richer countries.

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326 words
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