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Speaking topic in text: Using the examples from the lecture, discuss two types of narrators that an author of fiction might use. v.1

Speaking topic in text: Using the examples from the lecture, discuss two types of narrators that an author of fiction might use. v. 1
It is indeed true that video cameras are increasing being used in many metropolitan cities to deter crime. While I accept that surveillance cameras invade our privacy, in my opinion, the benefits of using them to improve security undoubtedly outweigh the demerits. The installation of video cameras in public places certainly leads to the invasion of privacy. They capture each and every moment and as such people who are aware of their presence often feel forced to make a conscious effort to conduct themselves respectably when they access public places. While this is not a major issue, it can certainly be a nuisance at times. Even so, I would argue that the benefits derived from deploying video cameras in public places are more pronounced than the limitations. Firstly, they make public places safer by reducing or even preventing criminal activities. This is because being under the constant surveillance of video cameras deters both amateur and seasoned criminals from committing crimes. They understand that they are being watched and this stops them from doing anything illegal. For example, New Zealand, which is one of the most peaceful nations in the world, has considerably reduced the crime rate during the night by installing video cameras at all public places. Of course, increasing police patrolling of streets may also help to reduce crime, but cameras have an advantage over human law keepers. Unlike a human police officer, a surveillance camera will not fall asleep or develop fatigue while on duty. In conclusion, the advantages of utilizing / installing video cameras to enhance security at public places certainly outweigh the disadvantages. After all, safety is more important than privacy.
It is
indeed
true that
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video
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cameras
are increasing being
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used
in
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many
metropolitan cities to deter
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crime
. While I accept that surveillance
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cameras
invade our privacy, in my opinion, the benefits of using them to
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improve
security
undoubtedly
outweigh the demerits.

The installation of
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video
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cameras
in
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public
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places
certainly
leads to the invasion of privacy. They capture each and every moment and as such
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people
who are aware of their presence
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often
feel forced to
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make
a conscious effort to conduct themselves
respectably
when they access
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public
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places
. While this is not a major issue, it can
certainly
be a nuisance at times.

Even
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so
, I would argue that the benefits derived from deploying
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video
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cameras
in
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public
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places
are more pronounced than the limitations.
Firstly
, they
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make
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public
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places
safer by reducing or even preventing criminal activities. This is
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because
being under the constant surveillance of
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video
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cameras
deters both amateur and seasoned criminals from committing
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crimes
. They understand that they are being
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watched
and this
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stops
them from doing anything illegal.
For example
, New Zealand, which is one of the most peaceful nations in the world, has
considerably
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reduced
the
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crime
rate during the night by installing
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video
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cameras
at all
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public
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places
.
Of course
, increasing police patrolling of streets may
also
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help
to
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reduce
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crime
,
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but
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cameras
have an advantage over human law keepers. Unlike a human police officer, a surveillance
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camera
will not fall asleep or develop fatigue while on duty.

In conclusion
, the advantages of utilizing / installing
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video
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cameras
to enhance security at
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public
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places
certainly
outweigh the disadvantages.
After all
, safety is more
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important
than privacy.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Speaking topic in text: Using the examples from the lecture, discuss two types of narrators that an author of fiction might use. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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