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speaking question 5: summarize the woman's problem, and then state which solution do you recommend. v.1

speaking question 5: summarize the woman's problem, and then state which solution do you recommend. v. 1
Citizens' life expectancy has become a serious issue for several countries in the world lately. It is believed that people's health standard is predicted to get lower than the current state. I personally agree with this statement. This essay will explain the reason why I believe it is true and provide some related examples regarding it. First and foremost, people, especially workers in big cities, have to deal with traffic congestion every single working day. They spend most of their time in the office and on the road. Moreover, the long office hours are not enough for them to meet the work deadlines. So, most of the time, those employees have to finish their work after arriving at home. This daily routine makes city dwellers lacked of time, for example to sleep, do physical activities, and pick their healthy food. They end up choosing fast and processed food instead. Second, by committing to that daily routine and lifestyle, people ruin their own biological clock which leads to several health problems, namely hypertension, obesity, and cancer. These noncommunicable diseases are listed in three most deadly diseases in the world according to WHO. The number of people's mortality caused by the mentioned diseases are increasing year by year. This fact proves that the people's health is decreasing and can be worse years ahead. In conclusion, I agree with the statement of standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. This prediction can be logically explained by analyzing the current people's sedentary lifestyle, food consumption, and stress induced by work-related issues.
Citizens' life expectancy has become a serious issue for several countries in the world lately. It
is believed
that
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people's
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health
standard
is predicted
to
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get
lower than the
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current
state. I
personally
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agree
with this statement. This essay will
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explain
the reason why I believe it is true and provide
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some
related examples regarding it.

First
and foremost,
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people
,
especially
workers in
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big
cities,
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have to
deal with traffic congestion every single working day. They spend most of their time in the office and on the road.
Moreover
, the long office hours are not
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enough
for them to
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meet
the work deadlines.
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So
, most of the time, those employees
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have to
finish their work after arriving at home. This daily routine
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makes
city dwellers lacked of time,
for example
to sleep, do physical activities, and pick their healthy food. They
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end
up choosing
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fast
and processed food
instead
.

Second, by committing to that daily routine and lifestyle,
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people
ruin their
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own
biological clock which leads to several
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health
problems,
namely
hypertension, obesity, and cancer. These noncommunicable diseases
are listed
in three most deadly diseases in the world according to
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WHO
. The number of
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people's
mortality caused by the mentioned diseases are increasing year by year. This fact proves that the
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people's
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health
is decreasing and can be worse years ahead.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
with the statement of standard of
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people's
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health
is likely to be lower in the future than it is
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now
. This prediction can be
logically
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explained
by analyzing the
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current
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people's
sedentary lifestyle, food consumption, and
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stress
induced by work-related issues.
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IELTS essay speaking question 5: summarize the woman's problem, and then state which solution do you recommend. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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