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Spatial MemoryAn important survival skill of animals is their spatial memory, the ability to remember objects based on their relationship to other things in the environment. Animals use their spatial memory to make a list of paths leading to various goals v.1

Spatial MemoryAn important survival skill of animals is their spatial memory, the ability to remember objects based on their relationship to other things in the environment. Animals use their spatial memory to make a list of paths leading to various goals v. 1
At present, scientific research across the world is carried out and controlled sometimes by governments, sometimes by private companies. While there are some arguments in favour of scientific research by corporations, I agree with the view that this should be funded and supervised by the state. The private sector argues that it is willing to undertake scientific research, but there are two significant dangers in this. In terms of the quality and objectivity of the research itself, corporations which carry this out may be tempted to manipulate results in order to maximize profits. There have been numerous scandals as a result of new products beingintroduced hurriedly after inadequate trials. For example thalidomide, developed by a German drug company, resulted in the birth of thousands of malformed children. From an ethical perspective, leaving research into areas such asgenetic engineering in the hands of corporations may have profound social consequences -such as GM crops, with unproven effects which may destroy whole ecosystems as a result of meddling with nature. Although governments have to allocate resources to many areas of public spending, it is essential that they be responsible for scientific research. Firstly, the highest standards can be set by providing funding for university departments to carry out high-quality research designed to benefit society, not to break into new markets or to gain a competitive edge. Knowledge thus gained can be shared worldwide throughout the academic community. Secondly, government-decision making is the best way to prioritize expenditure on specific areas of research, taking into consideration the needs of society, both present and future. One example is the development of renewable energy to meet growing demands. In conclusion, I agree strongly with the view that governments should bear sole responsibility for scientific research.
At present,
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across the world
is carried
out and controlled
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sometimes
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governments
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sometimes
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companies
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some
arguments in
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favour
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by corporations, I
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agree
with the view that this should
be funded
and supervised by the state.

The private sector argues that it is willing to undertake
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scientific
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research
,
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but
there are two significant
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dangers
in this. In terms of the quality and objectivity of the
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research
itself, corporations which carry this out may
be tempted
to manipulate results in order to maximize profits. There have been numerous scandals
as a result
of new products
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beingintroduced
hurriedly
after inadequate trials.
For example
thalidomide, developed by a German drug
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company
, resulted in the birth of thousands of malformed children. From an ethical perspective, leaving
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research
into areas such
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asgenetic
engineering in the hands of corporations may have profound social consequences -such as GM crops, with unproven effects which may
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destroy
whole ecosystems
as a result
of meddling with nature.

Although
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governments
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have to
allocate resources to
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many
areas of public spending, it is essential that they be responsible for
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scientific
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research
.
Firstly
, the highest standards can
be set
by providing funding for university departments to carry out high-quality
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research
designed to benefit society, not to break into new markets or to gain a competitive edge. Knowledge
thus
gained can
be shared
worldwide throughout the academic community.
Secondly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
-decision making is the best way to prioritize expenditure on specific areas of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
, taking into consideration the needs of society, both present and future. One example is the development of renewable energy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
growing demands.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
strongly
with the view that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should bear sole responsibility for
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scientific
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research
.
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IELTS essay Spatial MemoryAn important survival skill of animals is their spatial memory, the ability to remember objects based on their relationship to other things in the environment. Animals use their spatial memory to make a list of paths leading to various goals v. 1

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4 paragraphs
289 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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