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Space travel has been made sometime and people think that space tourism will be probably developed in the future. Do you think space travel would be a positive and negative development? v.1

Space travel has been made sometime and people think that space tourism will be probably developed in the future. Do you think space travel would be a positive and negative development? v. 1
It is often said that people have more choices than they had once. I totally agree with this, and I believe that it is because of the internet and the globalisation. It is clear that the internet has led to a huge increase in options that are available to us. One of the best examples can be online streaming services. There is countless number of free and paid online video and music services, on which one may spend much time with pleasure, but I would agree that this causes problems for average users, since we have to make decisions every time about which content we are willing to consume, and it may take time and make us feel stressed. A personal example of this trend would be fact that we had only a tv, with the limited number of channels when I was a child, and it was facile to select what to watch among them. However, now I have subscriptions to some paid online streaming services, there are also many free ones, and moreover, I have a television, so sometimes it is really hard to decide. Secondly, another factor, which makes us undecided is the globalisation. The globalisation is making the world smaller, and people are able to get in contact with each other easier. For example, cheaper flights make middle and even low-income people to travel overseas. This means more holiday destinations and even new places that are potential to live for all these people, but then this means stressful and time-consuming deciding process for all these people. We no longer have the limited choices to travel like our grandparents did once, and this also affects us in another way. Nowadays, young adults want to study and even work abroad more to have different experiences, and it is entirely because of the globalism that entered our lives that made oversea travels affordable and easier. However, now these young people get stuck among a lot of options that they never had before, and they have difficulty in making final decision. In summary, we are faced with a large number of choices in many aspects of life, and this has negative aspects that cannot be ignored on our lives
It is
often
said that
people
have more choices than they had once. I
totally
agree
with this, and I believe that it is
because
of the internet and the
globalisation
.

It is
clear
that the internet has led to a huge increase in options that are available to us. One of the best examples can be online streaming services. There is countless number of free and paid online video and music services, on which one may spend much time with pleasure,
but
I would
agree
that this causes problems for average users, since we
have to
make
decisions every time about which content we are willing to consume, and it may take time and
make
us feel
stressed
. A personal example of this trend would be fact that we had
only
a
tv
, with the limited number of channels when I was a child, and it was facile to select what to
watch
among them.
However
,
now
I have subscriptions to
some
paid online streaming services, there are
also
many
free ones, and
moreover
, I have a television,
so
sometimes
it is
really
hard
to decide.

Secondly
, another factor, which
makes
us undecided is the
globalisation
. The
globalisation
is making the world smaller, and
people
are able to
get
in contact with each other easier.
For example
, cheaper flights
make
middle and even low-income
people
to travel overseas. This means more holiday destinations and even new places that are potential to
live
for all these
people
,
but
then this means stressful and time-consuming deciding process for all these
people
. We no longer have the limited choices to travel like our grandparents did once, and this
also
affects us in another way. Nowadays, young adults want to study and even work abroad more to have
different
experiences, and it is
entirely
because
of the globalism that entered our
lives
that made oversea travels affordable and easier.
However
,
now
these young
people
get
stuck among
a lot of
options that they never had
before
, and they have difficulty in making final decision.

In summary, we
are faced
with
a large number of
choices in
many
aspects of life, and this has
negative
aspects that cannot be
ignored
on our
lives
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Space travel has been made sometime and people think that space tourism will be probably developed in the future. Do you think space travel would be a positive and negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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