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Space exploration requires vast sums of money. Is the amount of money spent on space research justifiable? Could the money be better spent? v.3

Space exploration requires vast sums of money. Is the amount of money spent on space research justifiable? Could the money be better spent? v. 3
There has always been considerable discussion and debate about whether governments in many countries should spend taxpayers’ money on space research. In my view, it is impossible to justify the amount of money spent on space research. Generally speaking, the main reason for this position is that there are several areas in which the money could be invested better. When we have so many problems and hungry people in the Earth, spending money on space is not a good choice at all. The first point to make is that governments have a responsibility to spend public money on projects that bring a benefit to the citizens. This has not been the case with space research as most developments have been limited to helping astronauts in space or have been very specialised. For example, it is not of great value to the general public that we now have pens and biros that can write upside down. This does not merit the huge amount of money spent. Little success has been made so far on space exploration except landing on the Moon or knowing that Mars had once been a place for living being. What good that can bring to people who are starving in many countries? The second point to make is that there are many much more urgent projects on Earth that require investment. If governments spent less money on space research, then they would be able to help solve some of these problems such as population control, elimination of diseases like cholera, global warming and food shortages. It seems to me that all of these issues are more important because they affect the lives of millions of ordinary people. An illustration of this is that the US government could provide food for all the starving people in the world if they did not spend so much on NASA. My conclusion is that politicians should not fund space research. The grounds for saying this are that it is very costly and provides little real benefits. Furthermore, there are several more urgent issues that need to be funded.
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countries should spend taxpayers’
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money
on
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space
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research
. In my view, it is impossible to justify the amount of
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money
spent on
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space
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research
.
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speaking, the main reason for this position is that there are several areas in which the
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money
could
be invested
better. When we have
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so
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many
problems and hungry
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people
in the Earth, spending
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money
on
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space
is not a
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choice at all.

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first
point to
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make
is that
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governments
have a responsibility to spend public
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money
on projects that bring a benefit to the citizens. This has not been the case with
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space
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research
as most developments have
been limited
to helping astronauts in
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space
or have been
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very
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specialised
.
For example
, it is not of great value to the
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general public
that we
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now
have pens and
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biros
that can write upside down. This does not merit the huge amount of
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money
spent.
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Little
success has
been made
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far on
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space
exploration except landing on the Moon or knowing that Mars had once been a place for living being. What
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good
that can bring to
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people
who are starving in
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many
countries?

The second point to
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make
is that there are
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many
much more urgent projects on Earth that require investment. If
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governments
spent less
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money
on
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space
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research
, then they would be able to
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help
solve
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some
of these problems such as population control, elimination of diseases like cholera, global warming and food shortages. It seems to me that all of these issues are more
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important
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because
they affect the
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lives
of millions of ordinary
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people
. An illustration of this is that the US
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government
could provide food for all the starving
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people
in the world if they did not spend
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so
much on NASA.

My conclusion is that politicians should not fund
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space
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research
. The grounds for saying this are that it is
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very
costly and provides
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little
real benefits.
Furthermore
, there are several more urgent issues that need to
be funded
.
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IELTS essay Space exploration requires vast sums of money. Is the amount of money spent on space research justifiable? Could the money be better spent? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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