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sometimes we are assigned to work on a project. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The group will be helped more by a person will be willing to do what other group members want than by the person who often strongly insist that things sh v.2

sometimes we are assigned to work on a project. The group will be helped more by a person will be willing to do what other group members want than by the person who often strongly insist that things sh v. 2
In today’s convoluted world, it becomes a controversial topic of how people can contribute to their group. I strongly agree that groups cannot reach their goals and targets if they person insists on their opinion. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most irrefutable reasons. To begin with, groups are able to increase their productivity and performance if one be willing to consider what others want. To elaborate, collaboration among all members pave the route in order to achieve success. Hence, this cooperation will be reached by the wholehearted dedication of all members when receiving others opinions. Accordingly, if all member declares their opinion, all positive and negative aspects of their view are investigated in order to make a wise decision, which bring more benefits to the whole group. For example, when I was at university, we wanted to hold a speech competition among all students. After making a meticulous program, a member of the group said that “the plane should be changed" . Ultimately, we arranged the plan again, a bunch of our time was wasted, and therefore, we could not hold the competition well. As a result, had he not insisted on his opinion to rearrange the plan, our time would not have wasted to hold competition effective. Apart from reducing efficiency, the second debatable point is that some people believe that in order to avoid giving rise conflict among the al members of the group, it is better to consider the opinion of a member who insists on his way. However, others believe that this kind of behavior may mitigate people' s impetus that they are working hard, and finally, their motivation will be lost. For this reason, I will take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter point is closely related to reality. Thus, I do believe that the more one emphasizes on their idea, the more the likelihood of collapsing group will be increased owing to lack of any motivation. By way of illustration, according to the survey conducted by the University of Tehran, those members who always think about themselves in each group instill stress and pressure into members resulting in failure of bong the group. To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that people who accentuate on their opinion bring negative ramifications for the group. In the first place, they reduce and sometimes eliminate team cooperation of the group, and in the second place the stress and anxiety are caused by this person may collapse the group.
In
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today
’s convoluted world, it becomes a controversial topic of how
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people
can contribute to their
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group
. I
strongly
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agree
that
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groups
cannot reach their goals and targets if
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they person
insists on their
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opinion
. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most irrefutable reasons.

To
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begin
with,
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groups
are able to increase their productivity and performance if one be willing to consider what others want. To elaborate, collaboration among all
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members
pave the route in order to achieve success.
Hence
, this cooperation will
be reached
by the wholehearted dedication of all
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members
when receiving others
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opinions
.
Accordingly
, if all
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member
declares their
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opinion
, all
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of their view
are investigated
in order to
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make
a wise decision, which bring more benefits to the whole
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group
.
For example
, when I was at university, we wanted to hold a speech competition among all students. After making a meticulous program, a
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member
of the
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group
said that “the
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plane
should be
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changed&quot
;
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.
Ultimately
, we arranged the plan again, a bunch of our time
was wasted
, and
therefore
, we could not hold the competition well.
As a result
, had he not insisted on his
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opinion
to rearrange the plan, our time would not have wasted to hold competition effective.

Apart from reducing efficiency, the second debatable point is that
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some
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people
believe that in order to avoid giving rise conflict among the
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al
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members
of the
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group
, it is better to consider the
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opinion
of a
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member
who insists on his way.
However
, others believe that this kind of behavior may mitigate
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people&
#039; s impetus that they are working
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hard
, and
finally
, their motivation will
be lost
.
For this reason
, I will take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter point is
closely
related to reality.
Thus
, I do believe that the more one emphasizes on their
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idea
, the more the likelihood of collapsing
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group
will
be increased
owing to lack of any motivation. By way of illustration, according to the survey conducted by the University of Tehran, those
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members
who always
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think
about themselves in each
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group
instill
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stress
and pressure into
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members
resulting in failure of bong the group.

To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one
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soon
realizes that
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people
who accentuate on their
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opinion
bring
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negative
ramifications for the
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group
. In the
first
place, they
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reduce
and
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sometimes
eliminate team cooperation of the
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group
, and in the second place the
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stress
and anxiety
are caused
by this person may collapse the
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group
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay sometimes we are assigned to work on a project. The group will be helped more by a person will be willing to do what other group members want than by the person who often strongly insist that things sh v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
425 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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