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sometimes advertising of such toys and fast foods is aim to childrens.some advertising have bad effect on children and their family.to what extend do you agree

sometimes advertising of such toys and fast foods is aim to childrens. some advertising have bad effect on children and their family. to what extend do you agree YmREN

Children in the early stages of growth have the hunger of every thing like toys, food, playing etc. But this also impact negative on their brain, as their are alot of things which is harmful for them but whatever the see or hear they want it. Many of us believe that advertising of the items is sometimes made a bad impact on the child and their families too. I strongely agree to this point of view because not everyone should be able to pay for such things. I support this view because there is difference between class of different people. For instance, if a child watch an advertising of a toy that is very expensive and his parents is not able to buy it, what should he do. The child of such faimily suffer alot and they will go to some illigal job to fulfilled his desire and a result crime will takes place. Another reason why I am disagree with this idea was the health of children. If they watch an advertising of such a food that is not good for their health and they like him as they watched him again and again so they will difinetly go for it. On contrast, the marketer also want to increase their economy, and for that they need more buyers. for the attraction of people they advertise their product in every possible way that the people will aware about their product. To conclude that advertising of the product which target childrens and thier families have bad effects on them, although there is some benefits also, but in my opinion advertising of such products which is harmful should be stop by the government.

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But
 this also
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negative
 on their brain, as Did you mean "there"?there
their
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are alot
 of things which is harmful for them This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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see
 or hear they want it. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
 of us believe that advertising of the items is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 made a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 impact on the child and their families too. I Possible spelling mistake found.stronglystrangely
strongely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 to this point of view This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 not everyone should be able to pay for such things.

I support this view This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 there is difference between This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. For instance
, if a child This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
watch
 an advertising of a toy that is
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very
 expensive and his parents is not able to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 it, what should he do. The child of such Possible spelling mistake found.family
faimily
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alot and
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some
Possible spelling mistake found.illegal
illigal
 job to fulfilled his desire and a result crime will takes place.

Another reason why I am disagree with this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 was the health of children. If they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
watch
 an advertising of such Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "food".food
a food
that is
 not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 for their Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).health, and
health and
 they like him as they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
watched
 him again and again This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 they will Possible spelling mistake found.divinely
difinetly
 go for it.

On contrast, the marketer also
 want to increase their economy, and for that they need more buyers. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFor
for
 the attraction of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 they advertise their product in every possible way that the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 will aware about their product.

To conclude
 that advertising of the product which target Possible spelling mistake found.children
childrens
 and Possible spelling mistake found.theirheartierThaithiefshear
thier
 families have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 effects on them, although there is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 benefits also
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 in my opinion advertising of such products which is harmful should be Did you mean  "stopped"?stopped
stop
 by the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
. 