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SOMETHING YOU BOUGHT BUT DON’T OFTEN USE

SOMETHING YOU BOUGHT BUT DON’T OFTEN USE gGeN1
I would like to tell you about a guitar that I bought but now I barely use it. I bought this guitar about two years ago. At that time, I was so obsessed with people playing the guitar. I was a great fan of Western music, and I was impressed by some artists who can play the guitar very well such as Taylor Swift. I personally loved the way the guitar sounded, and how people could play it and sing at the same time. I made a promise to myself that I would be able to play the guitar. That’s why I decided to buy a guitar. I went to a shop that was selling many kinds of musical instruments. When I walked into the shop, I immediately fell in love with a yellow acoustic guitar. It was made in Japan, and it looked totally beautiful. I asked the owner of the shop to play it for me, and I have to say it sounded amazing. The price of the guitar was a little bit expensive, but I bought it anyway. After buying the guitar, I spent a lot of my time learning to play it. I searched for tutorial videos on the Internet, I asked my friends who can play the guitar to help me, I even went to one guitar course. But I realised that playing the guitar was much more difficult than I expected. After three months, I wasn’t able to play any songs, so I gave up. Now, unless my friends come to my house and play the guitar, I barely touch it.
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bought
this guitar about two years ago. At that time, I was
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so
obsessed with
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people
playing the guitar. I was a great fan of Western music, and I
was impressed
by
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some
artists who can
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play
the guitar
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very
well such as Taylor Swift. I
personally
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loved
the way the guitar sounded, and how
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people
could
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play
it and sing at the same time.
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I
made a promise to myself that I would be able to
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play
the guitar.

That’s why I decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a guitar. I went to a shop that was selling
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
kinds of musical instruments. When I walked into the shop, I immediately fell in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
with a yellow acoustic guitar. It
was made
in Japan, and it looked
totally
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beautiful
. I asked the owner of the shop to
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play
it for me, and I
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have to
say it sounded amazing. The price of the guitar was a
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little bit
expensive,
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but
I
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bought
it anyway.

After buying the guitar, I spent
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a lot of
my time learning to
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play
it. I searched for tutorial videos on the Internet, I asked my friends who can
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play
the guitar to
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help
me, I even went to one guitar course.
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But
I
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realised
that playing the guitar was much more difficult than I
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expected
. After three months, I wasn’t able to
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play
any songs,
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so
I gave up.
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Now
, unless my friends
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come
to my
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house
and
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play
the guitar, I
barely
touch it.
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IELTS essay SOMETHING YOU BOUGHT BUT DON’T OFTEN USE

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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