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Some young people prefer to leave school at 16 or 18 to get a job, while others feel that there are more advantages to entering university after finishing their school education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving school at 16 or 18 to work instead of going to university?

Some people have no extra money, they are need to money for our family. They leave to school and sarch a job to our family. Some time he cannot pay school fee and leave our school because he need to job our family problems. Big reason of leave school some people or village people though study waste time or oney, they leave school and find a job going to university. Some people finish or complete school study. they are need to more and extra experience. they join a university and working hard experience and our good future. they working hard and one day he make our good future and some guys waste our money and time. they though we have more time we deserve. but they cannot deserve and at least bad result. Bad result big reason they always ask we deserve it, we deserve it. and though somethings all easy.
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IELTS essay Some young people prefer to leave school at 16 or 18 to get a job, while others feel that there are more advantages to entering university after finishing their school education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving school at 16 or 18 to work instead of going to university?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
151 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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