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Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this a positive or negative development? v.2

Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this a positive or negative development? v. 2
Nowadays, many universities are offering distance learning programs to students as an alternative to the classroom coaching. There are various merits of distance learning, and it also comes with several demerits. Both the advantages and disadvantages are elaborated further. It is unquestionable that there are several benefits of distance education. The most prominent one is, pupils can study at their own convenient time and do not need to adjust their study time according to the schedule of regular class as most of the distance learning program provides online material which can be accessed at any time and place, give freedom to the student to learn according to their comfort. Furthermore, it compares more economical to regular classes and can be pursued by students from weak financial background. Because, material is provided in soft copy, as well as, no physical class is essential to study which reduce the cost of the course. Besides, jobholders who want to study further for better future opportunities do not need to quit their current job for study. On the other hand, the disadvantages of distance education cannot be overlooked. Firstly, there is a lack of personal guidance from the tutor. By this, I mean that in this learning method, the standard teaching process is followed by university, and no personal guidance is provided, which are essential in the process of learning. Secondly, some time student procrastinates their study without any unavoidable reasons. As a result, they get their degree late and might miss the opportunity of a job. Finally, when learners learn with other students in the class, they not only get an education from books, but also learn cooperation with other students and get practical knowledge of a subject by experimenting theory in the lab. In conclusion, based on the above argument, I believe it is advantageous to the student as it is economical and time-friendly; however, the drawback cannot be ignored.
Nowadays,
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many
universities are offering
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distance
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learning
programs to
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students
as an alternative to the classroom coaching. There are various merits of
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distance
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learning
, and it
also
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comes
with several demerits. Both the advantages and disadvantages
are elaborated
further
.

It is unquestionable that there are several benefits of
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distance
education. The most prominent one is, pupils can
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study
at their
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own
convenient
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time
and do not need to adjust their
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study
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time
according to the schedule of regular
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class
as most of the
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distance
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learning
program provides online material which can
be accessed
at any
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time
and place, give freedom to the
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student
to learn according to their comfort.
Furthermore
, it compares more economical to regular
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classes
and can
be pursued
by
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students
from weak financial background.
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Because
, material
is provided
in soft copy,
as well
as, no physical
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class
is essential to
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study
which
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reduce
the cost of the course.
Besides
, jobholders who want to
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study
further
for better future opportunities do not need to quit their
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current
job for study.

On the other hand
, the disadvantages of
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distance
education cannot
be overlooked
.
Firstly
, there is a lack of personal guidance from the tutor. By this, I mean that in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
method, the standard teaching process
is followed
by university, and no personal guidance
is provided
, which are essential in the process of
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learning
.
Secondly
,
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some
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time
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student
procrastinates their
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study
without any unavoidable reasons.
As a result
, they
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get
their degree late and might miss the opportunity of a job.
Finally
, when learners learn with other
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students
in the
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class
, they not
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only
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get
an education from books,
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but
also
learn cooperation with other
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students
and
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get
practical knowledge of a subject by experimenting theory in the lab.

In conclusion
, based on the above argument, I believe it is advantageous to the
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student
as it is economical and time-friendly;
however
, the drawback cannot be
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ignored
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this a positive or negative development? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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