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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v.20

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 20
The debate weather it is a positive development that many universities are now providing online courses as opposed to, in-class delivery has become a matter of discussion among many. Personally, I believe that this is a positive development. In this essay, I shall provide arguments and examples to support this view. To begin with, one of the main reasons why online courses are beneficial is due to their flexibility and ease of learning. For example, students can rewind, watch and pause lectures that are available online, which makes it much easier to learn from. In addition, those students who could not leave their house due to medical reasons, can also be greatly benefited from the online courses. Furthermore, various studies have shown that online courses are more efficient in teaching new concepts when compared to in-class courses, owning to their previously mentioned flexibility. Moreover, another major advantage of online courses is the lower cost of education. For example, universities could save large sum of money in the form of electricity cost and building smaller infrastructure by incorporating online courses. Due to this, today online courses cost much less compared to traditional in-class courses, are a popular choice among students. Lastly, universities and colleges often struggle to find qualified professors for each and every course that is being offered by them. This limits the number of courses available to students. However, as online courses do not require lectures in order to teach students, they can be easily managed by a single professor. Thus, allowing universities to offer a large variety of courses to students. In conclusion, from the given arguments and examples I firmly believe that there are numerous advantages of courses being available on the internet. In the future, we could expect to see even more efficient and advanced technology being used in such online courses.
The debate weather it is a
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development that
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universities
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providing
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online
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courses
as opposed to, in-
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class
delivery has become a matter of discussion among
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many
.
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positive
development. In this essay, I shall provide arguments and
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examples
to support this view.

To
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begin
with, one of the main reasons why
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online
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courses
are beneficial is due to their flexibility and
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ease
of learning. For
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example
,
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students
can rewind,
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watch
and pause lectures that are available
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online
, which
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makes
it much easier to learn from.
In addition
, those
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who could not
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their
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due to medical reasons, can
also
be
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online
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courses
.
Furthermore
, various studies have shown that
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online
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courses
are more efficient in teaching new concepts when compared to in-
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class
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courses
, owning to their previously mentioned flexibility.

Moreover
, another major advantage of
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online
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courses
is the lower cost of education. For
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example
,
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universities
could save large sum of money in the form of electricity cost and building smaller infrastructure by incorporating
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online
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courses
. Due to this,
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online
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cost much less compared to traditional in-
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, are a popular choice among
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Lastly
,
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and colleges
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struggle to find qualified professors for each and every
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available to
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do not require lectures in order to teach
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, they can be
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universities
to offer a large variety of
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to students.

In conclusion
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believe that there are numerous advantages of
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being available on the internet. In the future, we could
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to
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even more efficient and advanced technology being
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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