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Some think that private companies should pay for cleaning up pollution, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss and state your own opinion.

Pollution causes many problems to the environment. It makes the air difficult to breathe and water unable to support life. Some people think that it is the government that should be responsible for cleaning up polluted areas while others think it is the job of private companies. This essay will look at both sides and then try to reach a conclusion. On one side, private companies cause most pollution, so it seems fair that they should have to clean it up. Many companies make large amounts of money by ignoring laws about pollution and dumping waste in rivers or pumping it into the air. Some of their profits should definitely be used to pay to clean up the places they pollute. However, it is the government’s job to make sure that laws are followed, so they should be responsible to. In many countries, government officials take money from company bosses in exchange for not making them follow anti-pollution laws. For example, in my country, a company polluted a massive area of the coast and killed many fish, but they just paid the government officials and no one was punished, except for the local fishermen who had no way to make a living anymore. If the laws are already there, they just need to be followed, so the government must try to avoid corruption and forced companies to follow the law or be punished. Overall, I think that private companies should be the ones who clean up polluted areas because they are the ones who pollute them. However, they normally will not do this by themselves, so the government must do its job and force companies to respect the environment or be treated like criminals.
Pollution causes
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problems to the environment. It
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the air difficult to breathe and water unable to support life.
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people
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that it is the
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that should be responsible for cleaning up polluted areas while others
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think
it is the job of private
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companies
. This essay will look at both sides and then try to reach a conclusion.

On one side, private
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companies
cause most pollution,
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so
it seems
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fair
that they should
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have to
clean it up.
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Many
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companies
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make
large amounts of money by ignoring
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laws
about pollution and dumping waste in rivers or pumping it into the air.
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Some
of their profits should definitely be
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used
to pay to clean up the places they pollute.

However
, it is the
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government’s
job to
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make
sure that
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laws
are followed
,
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so
they should be responsible to. In
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many
countries,
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government
officials take money from
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company
bosses in exchange for not making them follow anti-pollution
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laws
.
For example
, in my country, a
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company
polluted a massive area of the coast and killed
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many
fish,
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but
they
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just
paid the
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government
officials and no one
was punished
,
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except for
the local fishermen who had no way to
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make
a living anymore. If the
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laws
are already there, they
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just
need to
be followed
,
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so
the
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government
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must
try to avoid corruption and forced
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companies
to follow the
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law
or
be punished
.

Overall
, I
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think
that private
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companies
should be the
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ones
who clean up polluted areas
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because
they are the
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ones
who pollute them.
However
, they
normally
will not do this by themselves,
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so
the
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government
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must
do its job and force
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companies
to respect the environment or
be treated
like criminals.

IELTS essay Some think that private companies should pay for cleaning up pollution, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss and state your own opinion.

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