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Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of these two education systems and which is better?

I believe it is not an easy task to prepare a perfect plan regarding educational systems. Some schools require a specialisation in quite an early age. In others they don’t limit amount of subjects. IN this essay I am going to begin with positive aspects of both these educational approaches. Then I am going to describe my point of view when deciding if one of them is better. The systems where teenagers study a wide range of subjects until finishing school leave more time for them to choose their carrier. I believe for many it is an advantage. Most of pupils later on have a clearer idea what they want to do. So in many cases that leads to a satisfaction in their future working positions. The schools where the teenagers are directed to speacialisation in quite an early age are blessings mostly for those who tend to opt for some sort of craft. Musicans, painters but also tailors, hairdressers these all can have profit out of system where they can specialise for their future jobs as soon as possible. To tell you the truth I don’t believe one is better than the other. From my perspective it is more about the concrete person and her or his preferences and plans. If a person can live his or her own dream that’s the biggest advanture ever. That’s why I would prefer a mixture of these systems as an ideal equilibrium. So that everyone can choose what suits him or her the best. In conclusion I would say that there is no such thing as an ideal educational system.
I believe it is not an easy task to prepare a perfect plan regarding educational
systems
.
Some
schools require a
specialisation
in quite an early age. In
others they
don’t limit amount of subjects.

IN this essay I am going to
begin
with
positive
aspects of both these educational approaches. Then I am going to
describe
my point of view when deciding if one of them is better.

The
systems
where
teenagers
study a wide range of subjects until finishing school
leave
more time for them to choose their carrier.

I believe for
many
it is an advantage.
Most of pupils
later on have a clearer
idea
what they want to do.
So
in
many
cases that leads to a satisfaction in their future working positions.

The schools where the
teenagers
are directed
to
speacialisation
in quite an early age are blessings
mostly
for those who tend to opt for
some
sort of craft.
Musicans
, painters
but
also
tailors, hairdressers these all can have profit out of
system
where they can
specialise
for their future jobs as
soon
as possible.

To
tell
you the truth I don’t believe one is better than the other. From my perspective it is more about the concrete person and her or his preferences and plans. If a person can
live
his or her
own
dream that’s the biggest
advanture
ever. That’s why I would prefer a mixture of these
systems
as an ideal equilibrium.
So
that everyone can choose what suits him or her the best.

In
conclusion I
would say that there is no such thing as an ideal educational
system
.
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IELTS essay Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of these two education systems and which is better?

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  American English
7 paragraphs
268 words
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