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UNIVERSITY/GOVERNMENT RESPONSE TO THE BATTLE CRY OF THE EDUCATION SECTOR “ACADEMIC BREAK”

Education is the most important thing in the world that individual should possesses. We, Filipino believe that education is the only way to be grateful in life and have a better future. Life is full of challenges and obstacles that we need to face and should never outrun but what if we are not only looking at our lives but also to others? And what if this pandemic will change the usual education we had? Are we ready? Are they ready? Is the government ready for the consequences? Question that bothers me the most is that, if the system of education changes what they will do? We all know not everyone of us are capable or even afford to be in school, what will be their actions?
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IELTS essay UNIVERSITY/GOVERNMENT RESPONSE TO THE BATTLE CRY OF THE EDUCATION SECTOR “ACADEMIC BREAK”

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
127 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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