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Some students work while studying. This often results in lack of time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.5

Some students work while studying. This often results in lack of time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 5
Most of the students prefer a job with studies, It may lead to students to focus on work compared to studies. This causes the students don’t use knowledge in work. By some factor It is possible to resolve these kind of issues. As per my opinion, Good study is important, but nowadays everything is expensive like education, their own needs, food. Sometimes students are not able to afford these needs because they start to do part time job. To come up with a solution I feel government should change the education system. They should provide free studies up to higher secondary after that the basic fees of colleges should be free so every student learn up in college. The government should introduce free e-learning to every student. To continue, when the learning is free students will focus on studies. They won’t try to run for earning money. If still not fulfilled their need, they should start teaching at the same college, so with the studies sharing the knowledge helpful them to grow themselves. This kind of part time job should introduce into the education system. The authority should introduce scholarship for students who are excellent, good and average. The amount can vary as per the marks they earn. To conclude, education is important to each and every person. If uses in a proper way with the help of government and students’ contributions than no students will start work early in the age. Once they will get good knowledge, jobs are easy to get.
Most of the
students
prefer a
job
with
studies
, It may lead to
students
to focus on work compared to
studies
. This causes the
students
don’t
use
knowledge in work. By
some
factor It is possible to resolve
these kind
of issues.

As per my opinion,
Good
study
is
important
,
but
nowadays everything is expensive like
education
, their
own
needs, food.
Sometimes
students
are not able to afford these needs
because
they
start
to do
part time
job
. To
come
up with a solution I feel
government
should
change
the
education
system. They should provide
free
studies
up to higher secondary after that the basic fees of colleges should be
free
so
every
student
learn up in college. The
government
should introduce
free
e-learning to every student.

To continue, when the learning is
free
students
will focus on
studies
. They won’t try to run for earning money. If
still
not fulfilled their need, they should
start
teaching at the same college,
so
with the
studies
sharing the knowledge helpful them to grow themselves. This kind of
part time
job
should introduce into the
education
system. The authority should introduce scholarship for
students
who are excellent,
good
and average. The amount can vary as per the marks they earn.

To conclude
,
education
is
important
to each and every person. If
uses
in a proper way
with the
help
of
government
and
students’
contributions than no
students
will
start
work early in the age. Once they will
get
good
knowledge,
jobs
are easy to
get
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some students work while studying. This often results in lack of time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
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