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Some student take one year off between school and starting universities studies give advantages and disadvantages

Some student take one year off between school and starting universities studies give advantages and disadvantages RyoVP
2 comments with with the first point of view people should take one year gap and do some other activities for instance citizens should go for traveling and they learn many things by travelling most crucial thing they enjoy their life and sense relax secondly other advantage of GAP students to any job they get working experience and get more knowledge about any field thirdly basic vendor more time with their family and friends that helps them to strong their bonds. On the second hand with the other point of view students do not take one year of with studies between school and college because it effects on their studies they do not more concentrate on their studies and they do not detect comfortable one more thing is that after a gap students do not take interest in their studies because their mind is divert and under the influence of a gap their mind is distract they feel not less when they are study after one year of between finishing schools and college. To sum up study is an essential thing for everyone there are both the advantages and disadvantages of take a one year gap between their studies.
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year
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gap
and do
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other activities
for instance
citizens should go for
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traveling and
they learn
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many
things by travelling most crucial thing they enjoy their life and sense relax
secondly
other advantage of
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GAP
students to any job they
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get
working experience and
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get
more knowledge about any field
thirdly
basic vendor more time with their family and friends that
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helps
them to strong their bonds. On the second hand with the other point of view students do not take one
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year
of with
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studies
between school and college
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because
it effects on their
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studies
they do not more concentrate on their
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studies and
they do not detect comfortable one more thing is that after a
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gap
students do not take interest in their
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studies
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because
their mind is
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divert
and under the influence of a
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gap
their mind is
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distract
they feel not less when they are
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study
after one
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year
of between finishing schools and college. To sum up
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study
is an essential thing for everyone there
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are
both the advantages and disadvantages of take a one
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year
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gap
between their
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studies
.
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IELTS essay Some student take one year off between school and starting universities studies give advantages and disadvantages

Essay
  American English
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199 words
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