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Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers

Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers KKxM
various sports are very dangerous but some people still like them very much. i would like to give argument to support my view. in the first place, sports play an important role in our daily life while some people love to accept challenges and they want to become famous. mostly athletes dangerous stunt just to become famous. for instant, the sports players think that if we will do something dangerous then we will become very famous in society. they believe on this face that once we will famous then we can acquire different role in different advertisement. whereas they believe that advertisement is a good way for income. albeit they know this reality that we can loss our life in this dangerous activity. on the flip side, at a drop of the hat. government should make strict rule and regulations. the government should established some training institute. this is a moral responsibility of government that provide a good trainer. no one has any gadget that can measure the ability of some one. the one who participative in any dangerous sports the institute should check that which kind of deficit the support person has. if the athletes will not physically fit then government identify the deter he has. conclusion, the government should give all facilities to sports person and their should be a medical staff who check the participator.
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in
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sports
play an
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important
role in our daily life while
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some
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people
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challenges and
they want to become
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famous
.
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mostly
athletes
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dangerous
stunt
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just
to become
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famous
.
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for
instant, the
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players
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that if we will do something
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dangerous
then we will become
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very
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famous
in society.
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they
believe on this face that once we will
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famous
then we can acquire
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different
role in
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advertisement.
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whereas
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good
way for income.
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albeit
they know this reality that we can
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loss
our life in this
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dangerous
activity.
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on
the flip side, at a drop of the hat.
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government
should
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strict
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rule
and regulations.
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the
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should
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some
training institute.
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this
is a moral responsibility of
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government
that provide a
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good
trainer.
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no
one has any gadget that can measure the ability of
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.
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the
one who
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participative
in any
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dangerous
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sports
the institute should
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check
that which kind of deficit the support person has.
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if
the athletes will not
physically
fit then
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government
identify
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the deter
he has.
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conclusion
, the
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government
should give all facilities to
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sports
person and
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their
should be a medical staff who
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check
the participator.
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IELTS essay Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
228 words
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