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Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time because it has no direct connection with people s lives To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time because it has no direct connection with people s lives v. 1
Although lack conversations with neighbours does not grab a headline as frequently as many other social issues do, it does not mean that it is less serious. As a matter of fact, the chronic time pressure continues to be a problem worldwide, which is triggered to lose the art of communication. Despite its sizable influence, many citizens have not yet realized the seriousness of this issue. It is the goal of this essay to outline the potential causes of this problem and suggest possible solutions. People should first recognise that interaction is a backbone of the social and interpersonal development. Obviously, by invitingly flexible communication through the online platform, people become estranged from the external "real" world. Having more than a thousand friends in the virtual world, in applications such as Instagram, Facebook and Twitter, people losing the connection with natural life (world), even unaware of open-and-shut who lives just in the next apartment. [✨or Facebook users can claim to have hundreds of friends in their network, yet sometimes find it difficult to name half a dozen people that they have actually met in their local neighbourhood. ] Another potential reason is that most of the individuals work round the clock, being trapped in the cycle of monthly salary. By this way, they are trying to ensure themselves a decent standard of living, but neglecting the main values of mankind. Consequently, rampant acceleration of not only human needs, but also technologies prevent to build a strong connection with our surroundings. It’s easy to despair at the scale of the task, but it isn’t beyond humanity to solve it. The best approach to address communication issues is that creating 'neighbourhood sites' by state, in order to raise and debate local issues transparently and provide a channel and encouragement for people to get involved in civic and community issues. Participating in such events at least for half an hour creates a habit of people communicating with their neighbours. But it is not just social groups that can be used to mobilise communities, conducting public holidays and festivals extensively by volunteers together with authorities can have a similar effect. During this occasions people would able leave their daily routine as well as become closer with the dwellers of their region. Thus, despite of any challenges in this way, obviously, the problem can be solved by joint efforts. In conclusion, it is clear that there are several reasons why do people become excluded from society. Tackling this problem depends not only on the government's efforts to provide cohesion by establishing public meetings, but also on social attempt and desire to stay connected.
Although lack conversations with
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neighbours
does not grab a headline as
frequently
as
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many
other
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social
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issues
do, it does not mean that it is less serious. As a matter of fact, the chronic time pressure continues to be a
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problem
worldwide, which
is triggered
to lose the art of communication. Despite its sizable influence,
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many
citizens have not
yet
realized the seriousness of this
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issue
. It is the goal of this essay to outline the potential causes of this
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problem
and suggest possible solutions.

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People
should
first
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recognise
that interaction is a backbone of the
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social
and interpersonal development.
Obviously
, by
invitingly
flexible communication through the online platform,
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people
become estranged from the external
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"
real
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
world. Having more than a thousand friends in the virtual world, in applications such as Instagram, Facebook and Twitter,
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people
losing the connection with natural life (world), even unaware of open-and-shut who
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lives
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just
in the
next
apartment. [
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✨or
Facebook users can claim to have hundreds of friends in their network,
yet
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sometimes
find it difficult to name half a dozen
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people
that they have actually met in their local
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neighbourhood
.
Loose punctuation mark.
]
Another potential reason is that most of the individuals work round the clock,
being trapped
in the cycle of monthly salary. By this way, they are trying to ensure themselves a decent standard of living,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
neglecting the main values of mankind.
Consequently
, rampant acceleration of not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
human needs,
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but
also
technologies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
to build a strong connection with our surroundings.

It’s easy to despair at the scale of the task,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it isn’t beyond humanity to solve it. The best approach to address communication
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
is that creating '
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbourhood' is British English.
neighbourhood
sites' by state, in order to raise and debate local
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issues
transparently
and provide a channel and encouragement for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in civic and community
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
. Participating in such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
at least for half an hour creates a habit of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
communicating with their
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
.
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But
it is not
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just
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social
groups that can be
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used
to
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mobilise
communities, conducting public holidays and festivals
extensively
by volunteers together with authorities can have a similar effect. During this occasions
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people
Did you mean "would be able"?
would able
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
their daily routine
as well
as become closer with the dwellers of their region.
Thus
,
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
any challenges in this way,
obviously
, the
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problem
can
be solved
by joint efforts.

In conclusion
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that there are several reasons why do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
become excluded from society. Tackling this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
depends not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's efforts to provide cohesion by establishing public meetings,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
attempt and desire to stay connected.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time because it has no direct connection with people s lives v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
438 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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    Present relevant ideas
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