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Some say that basic finance management, cooking and other life skills should be taught in school to both boys and girls, while others think that they will learn these things later in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some say that basic finance management, cooking and other life skills should be taught in school to both boys and girls, while others think that they will learn these things later in life. W82ae
Learning is essential for get better life in the society. Consequently, few people believe that the basic finance Management, food prepare and other life skills should teach both male and female during the school time and others disagree with this they feel that, all these points are byheart after the schooling. This essay discussess both the views and give an opinion in the conclusion. On the one hand, in the society not all people have same taste and interest. Some are very good in education and others are not that much perfect in their subjectwise studies. They are interested in other activities. However, should try to teach them the other life skills during the school time. It would help them to get a better future. For example, some schools are trying to teach their students some basic skills such as painting, drawing story writing, dancing and all. As a result, this would help them to recognise the child's ability and it helps their future. On the other hand, others believe that all skills learn after their studies only. Because they think that the school is only for education purposes only. If we started to teach the Other skills during the school time, it will cannot help them to concentrate their studies. The parents scared that it will affect studies of their children. So they think that these skills are learn after the schooling is better. On the whole, I strongly believe that should learn all the skills during the school time onwards. It would make all students to become a strong and quality life in the society and it makes them to get a better life.
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life
in the society.
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people
believe that the basic finance Management, food prepare and
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other
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life
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skills
should
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teach
both male and female during the
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school
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time
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and others
disagree with this they feel that, all these points are
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after the schooling. This essay
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both the views and give an opinion in the conclusion.

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people
have same
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taste
and interest.
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are
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very
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good
in education
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and others
are not that much perfect in their
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subjectwise
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studies
. They
are interested
in
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other
activities.
However
, should try to
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teach
them the
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other
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life
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skills
during the
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school
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time
. It would
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help
them to
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get
a better future.
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,
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schools
are trying to
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teach
their students
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some
basic
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skills
such as painting, drawing story writing, dancing and all.
As a result
, this would
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help
them to
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recognise
the child's ability and it
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helps
their future.

On the
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other
hand, others believe that all
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skills
learn after their
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studies
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only
.
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is
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for education purposes
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only
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, it will cannot
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them to concentrate their
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studies
. The parents scared that it will affect
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studies
of their children.
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they
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think
that these
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skills
are
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learn
after the schooling is better.

On the whole
, I
strongly
believe that should learn all the
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skills
during the
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school
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time
onwards. It would
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make
all students to become a strong and quality
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life
in the society and it
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makes
them to
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get
a better
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life
.
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IELTS essay Some say that basic finance management, cooking and other life skills should be taught in school to both boys and girls, while others think that they will learn these things later in life.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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