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Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day. v. 1
Due to the work pressure, people have to suffer to strain every day. To overcome this, some psychologists suggest avoiding activity during particular time of the day. I am in discord with this statement and believe that physical exercise and social gathering will relief from stress. To begin with, physical exercise keeps body fit and reduces strain. After passing hectic day in office, people usually feel bored and stressed. For which people need exercise. As exercise increase the blood flow though the body and eventually mitigate the blood strain, and ultimately metal strain. Recent survey carried out by University of Oxford plays a good example here, study shows that 80% people feel exhausted and stress after work, and physical exercise, for instance, cycling reduces stain up to 65% based on ages and make rejuvenate themselves for next day work. Therefore, daily workout is mandatory to reduce stain. Moreover, social gathering reduces the stress people having due to longtime work. Thousands of people are working in office even after their normal work hour. Resulting in, more stress in employee mentally and physically. When people get back to home without spending some time meeting up friends feel even worst after arriving home. Things make worst when they spend after-office alone in home. Report, published by Human right watch, shows that 25% like to stay at home alone after work to reduce stress and ultimately, they feel for stress because they can not distract from office work. On the other hand, study tables that social gathering after office make people out of thinking about work make them feel better and they concentrate more in work later on. So, meeting up friends reduce work related stress. To sum up, while it looks that spending time along at home without doing anything can seemingly understand feel better, but it makes more engage with work-related thinking resulting in more stress. Local communities and government should create social gathering intermittently to keep up fit their human resource.
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pressure,
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have to
suffer to
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strain
every day. To overcome this,
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some
psychologists suggest avoiding activity during particular time of the day. I am in discord with this statement and believe that physical
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exercise
and
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social
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gathering
will relief from
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stress
.

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begin
with, physical
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exercise
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keeps
body fit and
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reduces
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strain
. After passing hectic day in
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office
,
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people
usually
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feel
bored and
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stressed
. For which
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people
need
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exercise
. As
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exercise
increase the blood flow though the body and
eventually
mitigate the blood
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strain
, and
ultimately
metal
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strain
. Recent survey carried out by University of Oxford plays a
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good
example here, study
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shows
that 80%
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people
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feel
exhausted and
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stress
after
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work
, and physical
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exercise
,
for instance
, cycling
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reduces
stain up to 65% based on ages and
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make
rejuvenate themselves for
next
day
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work
.
Therefore
, daily workout is mandatory to
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reduce
stain.

Moreover
,
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social
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gathering
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reduces
the
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stress
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people
having due to longtime
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work
. Thousands of
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people
are working in
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office
even after their normal
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work
hour. Resulting in, more
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stress
in employee mentally and
physically
. When
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people
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get
back to home without spending
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some
time meeting up friends
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feel
even worst after arriving home. Things
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make
worst when they spend after-office alone in home. Report, published by Human right
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watch
,
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shows
that 25% like to stay at home alone after
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work
to
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reduce
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stress
and
ultimately
, they
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feel
for
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stress
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because
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office
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work
.
On the other hand
, study tables that
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social
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gathering
after
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office
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make
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people
out of thinking about
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work
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them
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feel
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better and
they concentrate more in
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work
later on.
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So
, meeting up friends
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reduce
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work
related
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stress
.

To sum up, while it looks that spending time along at home without doing anything can
seemingly
understand
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feel
better,
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but
it
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makes
more engage with work-related thinking resulting in more
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stress
. Local communities and
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government
should create
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social
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gathering
intermittently
to
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keep
up fit their human resource.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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