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Some products can be made quickly by a machine. Other items take a long time to be made by hand. As a buyer, which do you prefer and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer. v.2

Some products can be made quickly by a machine. Other items take a long time to be made by hand. As a buyer, which do you prefer and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer. v. 2
Major debate in the field of taking part in universities revolves around the issue of whether educational institutes should accept well-qualified students or scholars of all ages without assessing their current academic levels. This essay will delve into both viewpoints and voice my personal opinions. On the one hand, it is admitted that students with decent marks should be trained by reputed universities. Intellectual personnel such as doctors, lawyers etcetera are feted in their countries these days. In addition, these people are lucrative sources of the national budget. American conglomerates exemplify perfectly in this case. Renowned companies have stimulated highly qualified IT workers by attractive salary policies with the aim of competing other firms. Therefore, intellectual students not only benefit their own countries by accelerating national GDP rate, but also shelter their families from monetary burdens. Consequently, it is vital for educational authorities to encourage well-performed scholars to pursue higher education. On the other hand, people should be given the freedom to do what they desire and embarking on universities is not an exception. It is absurd to say that education plays no useful role in the adulthood. The country would extremely benefit if its citizens decide to learn in universities despite their ages. However, senior learners must be applied to certain training programs provided appropriately by universities. To conclude, I believe that everyone can freely broaden knowledge by applying to a university in conformity with his or her financial conditions. Notwithstanding, students who capable of affording university courses, should not be profitable from national funding for education.
Major debate in the field of taking part in
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universities
revolves around the issue of whether educational institutes should accept well-qualified
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
or scholars of all ages without assessing their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
academic levels. This essay will delve into both viewpoints and voice my personal opinions.

On the one hand, it
is admitted
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
with decent marks should
be trained
by reputed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
. Intellectual personnel such as doctors, lawyers etcetera
are feted
in their countries these days.
In addition
, these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are lucrative sources of the national budget. American conglomerates exemplify
perfectly
in this case
. Renowned
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
have stimulated
highly
qualified IT workers by attractive salary policies with the aim of competing other firms.
Therefore
, intellectual
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students
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
benefit their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
countries by accelerating national GDP rate,
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but
also
shelter their families from monetary burdens.
Consequently
, it is vital for educational authorities to encourage well-performed scholars to pursue higher education.

On the other hand
,
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people
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the freedom to do what they desire and embarking on
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universities
is not an exception. It is absurd to say that education plays no useful role in the adulthood. The country would
extremely
benefit if its citizens decide to learn in
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universities
despite their ages.
However
, senior learners
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be applied
to certain training programs provided
appropriately
by universities.

To conclude
, I believe that everyone can
freely
broaden knowledge by applying to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
in conformity with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
his or her
financial conditions. Notwithstanding,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
who capable of affording
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
courses, should not be profitable from national funding for education.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some products can be made quickly by a machine. Other items take a long time to be made by hand. As a buyer, which do you prefer and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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