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Some pepple claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? v.1

Some pepple claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? v. 1
Some would argue that not adequate of the wastage from the houses is being recycled and the state must make a policy to reprocess the wastage materials more and more. This essay totally agrees with that statement because it is essential for the climate and the authority can make a law to enforce it. First of all, the reuse of disposable materials is a good way to maintain a healthy earth's atmosphere. Millions of people throw away their waste materials into the garbage every day. By throwing it directly to nature, it may destroy the surrounding environment. If that unused material can be reused after some processing that may help to earn money as well as it will be better for the natural climate. For example, CNN published a news that the people of Japan started to reuse their disposable products, therefore, they earned from it and their country's climate became better by this initiative. Another point to consider is that a policy can change the entire scenery of ravage materials if Authorities want. There is a huge population of developing nations and they do not concern about waste materials. If the authority makes a policy, and referred that it is mandatory to reuse their home ravage. This will bring a positive change in the recycling industries. For example, the authority of Germany that the government passed a law in their parliament that people have to recycle home ravage and now they are the highest recycling rate in the world. In conclusion, the throwing of unused material is not good for the circumstances, therefore, the bureaucrat should make a strong law to recycle waste materials that will be better for the environment and the economy.
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would argue that not adequate of the wastage from the
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houses
is
being recycled
and the state
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must
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make
a policy to reprocess the wastage
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materials
more and more. This essay
totally
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agrees
with that statement
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because
it is essential for the climate and the
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authority
can
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make
a law to enforce it.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the reuse of disposable
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materials
is a
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good
way to maintain a healthy earth's atmosphere. Millions of
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people
throw away their waste
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materials
into the garbage every day. By throwing it
directly
to nature, it may
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destroy
the surrounding environment. If that unused
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material
can
be reused
after
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some
processing that may
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help
to earn money
as well
as it will be better for the natural climate.
For example
, CNN published
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a news
that the
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people
of Japan
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started
to reuse their disposable products,
therefore
, they earned from it and their country's climate became better by this initiative.

Another point to consider is that a policy can
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change
the entire scenery of ravage
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materials
if
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Authorities
want. There is a huge population of developing
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nations and
they do not concern about waste
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materials
. If the
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authority
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makes
a policy, and referred that it is mandatory to reuse their home ravage. This will bring a
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positive
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change
in the recycling industries.
For example
, the
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authority
of Germany that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
passed a law in their parliament that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
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have to
recycle home ravage and
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now
they are the highest recycling rate in the world.

In conclusion
, the throwing of unused
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
material
is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for the circumstances,
therefore
, the bureaucrat should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
a strong law to recycle waste
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
that will be better for the environment and the economy.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some pepple claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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