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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? v.1

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. v. 1
As time goes by, the population average increases rapidly, hence, cities start to suffer from congestion, especially from the transportation and the constructivism side. Some people say that reducing the amount of the factories in the cities can be a great solution. However, I think that there are many other possible ways to solve this trouble. Nowadays, the average number of people around the world increase, which cause traffic and housing problems. However, this issue can be solved through different ways. First of all, increasing the number of skyscrapers which provides us a huge number of flats that contains lots of people and in a small area can solve the inhabitation problem efficiently. In other words, some countries started to build, for example, towering skyscrapers instead of twenty buildings, thus, they get rid of the housing problems. secondly, in order to avoid the traffic jam, countries can increase the number of railways or any other transport system like trains and buses that can be used instead of cars. In addition to that, developing the transport system can solve the parking problems which require a large area only for cars, thus, the countries which reduced the measure of the parking places, can build something more efficient instead of them. For example, if all workers used the railways to go to their work places, the measure of cars would decrease sharply. In conclusion, although some people say that transferring the companies and their employees can be a solution for the overcrowding, this is not an efficient way. However, building skyscrapers and railways can be more effective.
As time goes by, the population average increases
rapidly
,
hence
, cities
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start
to suffer from congestion,
especially
from the transportation and the constructivism side.
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Some
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people
say that reducing the amount of the factories in the cities can be a great solution.
However
, I
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think
that there are
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many
other possible ways to solve this trouble.

Nowadays, the average
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number
of
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people
around the world increase, which cause traffic and housing problems.
However
, this issue can
be solved
through
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different
ways.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, increasing the
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number
of skyscrapers which provides us a huge
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of flats that contains lots of
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people
and in a
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small
area can solve the
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inhabitation
problem
efficiently
.
In other words
,
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some
countries
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started
to build,
for example
, towering skyscrapers
instead
of twenty buildings,
thus
, they
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get
rid of the housing problems.

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secondly
, in order to avoid the traffic jam, countries can increase the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of railways or any other transport system like trains and buses that can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
instead
of cars.
In addition
to that, developing the transport system can solve the parking problems which require a large area
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only
for cars,
thus
, the countries which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
the measure of the parking places, can build something more efficient
instead
of them.
For example
, if all workers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
the railways to go to their work places, the measure of cars would decrease
sharply
.

In conclusion
, although
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
say that transferring the
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companies
and their employees can be a solution for the overcrowding, this is not an efficient way.
However
, building skyscrapers and railways can be more effective.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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