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Some peoples think that students going abroad for studies is a great lose for their home country while others believe that there are also advantages. to what extend do you agree with this?

Some peoples think that students going abroad for studies is a great lose for their home country while others believe that there are also advantages. y7qJd
Owing to the fact that studying abroad is more convenient and cheaper than early days, tempt more pupils to opt for foreign countries rather than staying in their home country. there are advantages and negatives aspects in those kind of choices, making it one of the most important step for each student for a better study experience. I would like to discuss, in this essay, the motive and impacts of a county which receive and loss students. On the one hand, the country which receives foreign students will have certain advantages. Most of the countries that offers better and cheaper educational facilities for foreign students, facing a common problem, lack of population, that keep them fall under low economic powers. Even though the government is willing to provide better facilities and funding, with minimal population they are not able to reach their targeted gross development rate. For instance, Canada which is 4 times larger than India in terms of geographical area only has one tenth of its population. In addition, when considering the age groups of students, most of them fall under youngsters. youngsters are considered as the efficient working groups of a communal. Therefore, allowing their migration will in terms increase the productivity of a state. To spotlight this, a study conducted by Human Wealth Organization(HWO) United Kingdom, shows that the overall GDP rate of England climbed gradually after bringing serious flexibilities for student visa. On the other hand, counties loosing a huge group of young adults, because they want to move to other nations to persuade their studies, would be seen as a system with lack of education without giving them the proper level to move further with their life. For instance, countries like India and China shows only a minor interest in sending their students to study abroad than pervious years. Owing to the fact that, most of the abroad going students tempt to settle down in foreign countries rather than returning after their studies. In conclusion, having a greater number of foreign students have a little impact on the investment on the education sector. but it pays off with several benefits. Therefore, i should say its beneficial for the foreign students home country, however, there are advantages of having new students.
Owing to the fact that studying abroad is more convenient and cheaper than early days, tempt more pupils to opt for
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foreign
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countries
rather
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country
.
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there
are advantages and negatives aspects in
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those kind
of choices, making it one of the most
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important
step for each
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student
for a better
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study
experience. I would like to discuss, in this essay, the motive and impacts of a county which receive and loss students.

On the one hand, the
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country
which receives
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foreign
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students
will have certain advantages. Most of the
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countries
that offers better and cheaper educational facilities for
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foreign
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students
, facing a common problem, lack of population, that
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keep
them fall under low economic powers.
Even though
the
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government
is willing to provide better facilities and funding, with minimal population they are not able to reach their targeted gross development rate.
For instance
, Canada which is 4 times larger than India in terms of geographical area
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only
has one tenth of its population.
In addition
, when considering the age groups of
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students
, most of them fall under youngsters.
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youngsters
are considered
as the efficient working groups of
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a communal
.
Therefore
, allowing their migration will in terms increase the productivity of a state. To spotlight this, a
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study
conducted by Human Wealth Organization(
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HWO
) United Kingdom,
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shows
that the
overall
GDP rate of England climbed
gradually
after bringing serious
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flexibilities
for
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student
visa.

On the other hand
, counties loosing a huge group of young adults,
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because
they want to
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move
to other nations to persuade their
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studies
, would be
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seen
as a system with lack of education without giving them the proper level to
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move
further
with their life.
For instance
,
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countries
like India and China
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shows
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only
a minor interest in sending their
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to
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study
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abroad
than
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pervious
years. Owing to the fact that, most of the abroad going
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students
tempt to settle down in
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foreign
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countries
rather
than returning after their studies.

In conclusion
, having a greater number of
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foreign
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students
have a
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little
impact on the investment on the education sector.
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but
it pays off with several benefits.
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,
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should say its beneficial for the
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foreign
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students
home
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,
however
, there are advantages of having new
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students
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IELTS essay Some peoples think that students going abroad for studies is a great lose for their home country while others believe that there are also advantages.

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