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some people work for the same organizations all their working life. Other thinks that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

"Either you run the day or the day runs you" Working for any organization would be a hectic task to do. Depending on what work the person is doing and what pay the person is getting, people tend to stay at one organization or change whenever needed. Some people do work for the same organization for all their life but some people have an urge to change their organization frequently. The subsequent paragraph elaborates more on the view with an appropriate illustration. According to some people, staying at one organization gives us more knowledge and also can help us grow in the same organization. People tend to be stationary at a point in their life where they feel it's easy to work for one organization than multiple organizations. When a person has a surety of his/her whole life, they do have an impulse reaction to stick to the same job for a lifetime. On the other hand, some people think working for different organizations gives us more exposure to the world and introduces us to a different work environment. Working for multiple companies can help a person to grow in many ways. People gain their confidence, they are more outspoken, and also increases their knowledge. I believe people working in both conditions can do well in their life. For instance, I have a group of friends working for different organizations. One of my friends is working for the same company for the past 2 years and wants to continue there because she has a permanent income and many other benefits. On the other hand, I have one friend who keeps on changing the organization because she is not satisfied with the job or the pay. Also, she has a mindset that changing organizations would help her get more confident. So it depends on the persons' mindsets.
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Working for any
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would be a hectic task to do. Depending on what
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person
is doing and what pay the
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person
is getting,
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tend to stay at one
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organization
or
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change
whenever needed.
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do
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for the same
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for all their
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life
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people
have an urge to
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change
their
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frequently
. The subsequent paragraph elaborates more on the view with an appropriate illustration.

According to
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, staying at one
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gives us more knowledge and
also
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help
us grow in the same
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organization
.
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tend to be stationary at a point in their
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life
where they feel it's easy to
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for one
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than multiple
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. When a
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has a surety of his/her whole
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, they do have an impulse reaction to stick to the same job for a lifetime.
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think
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for
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different
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organizations
gives us more exposure to the world and introduces us to a
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different
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work
environment.
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for multiple
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companies
can
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help
a
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person
to grow in
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ways.
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People
gain their confidence, they are more outspoken, and
also
increases their knowledge.

I believe
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people
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in both conditions can do well in their
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life
.
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, I have a group of friends
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working
for
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different
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. One of my friends is
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for the same
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company
for the past 2 years and wants to continue there
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she has a permanent income and
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many
other benefits.
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, I have one friend who
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keeps
on changing the
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organization
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because
she is not satisfied with the job or the pay.
Also
, she has a mindset that changing
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organizations
would
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help
her
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get
more confident.
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it depends on the persons' mindsets.

IELTS essay some people work for the same organizations all their working life. Other thinks that it is better to work for different organizations.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
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