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It is considered by some that women and men have the same rule in terms of job in the whole society, while some of them argue that it is not sure for them as there are different kinds of criteria to permeate work force.

It is considered by some that women and men have the same rule in terms of job in the whole society, while some of them argue that it is not sure for them as there are different kinds of criteria to permeate work force. It seems that both men and women are not the same capability of work, I will explain why in this essay. Firstly, although female and male people are involved in human beings. They are not accountable for same rule. We know that girl and boy children who are different each other such as boys play football or rugby whilst girls play with their dolls. Since we were born, we have been diverse one another especially girlgs are extremely delicate than boys. A second negative factor is their power at work. Providing that women work mining i inside instead of men, there are many issues coming to society. In other words, underground in mining is truly cold that caused their common women diseases so men are more affordable to work instead. It is true that for women there are possible methods to work in any fields because democracy is the best option for everyone. Despite this, it seems that many people have the same idea to allot work duties. To conclude, eventhough between men and women are different as a face or body shape, they have the same rule in society. Women never do all men’s work duty because their power is less than men in the world.
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in terms of job in the whole society, while
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some
of them argue that it is not sure for them as there are
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force. It seems that both
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men
and
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women
are not the same capability of
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, I will
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why in this essay.

Firstly
, although female and male
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people
are involved
in human beings. They are not accountable for same
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rule
. We know that girl and boy children who are
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different
each other such as boys play football or rugby whilst girls play with their dolls. Since we
were born
, we have been diverse one another
especially
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extremely
delicate than boys. A second
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factor is their power at
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work
. Providing that
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women
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work
mining i inside
instead
of
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men
, there are
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many
issues coming to society.
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, underground in mining is
truly
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cold
that caused their common
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women
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diseases
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men
are more affordable to
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work
instead
.

It is true that for
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women
there are possible methods to
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work
in any fields
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because
democracy is the best option for everyone. Despite this, it seems that
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many
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people
have the same
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idea
to allot
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work
duties.

To conclude
,
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men
and
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women
are
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different
as a face or body shape, they have the same
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rule
in society.
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Women
never do all
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men’s
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work
duty
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because
their power is less than
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men
in the world.
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IELTS essay It is considered by some that women and men have the same rule in terms of job in the whole society, while some of them argue that it is not sure for them as there are different kinds of criteria to permeate work force.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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