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Some people work for the same organization all their working live. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

The attitude of working for organizations has been at the center of a global concern over the last few decades. Although the majority of people work for various organizations during their working lives, there are still some individuals who remain loyal to only one organization. The question, however, is whether people should work for different organizations or only one organization. In this essay, I shall examine both positive and negative aspects of this argument. First and foremost, it is an undeniable fact that remaining loyal to an employer or a specific organization has some benefits. For example, if a person spends most of his/her working life in a unique corporation, he/she will become master in that specific carrier. Therefore, these people can handle a lot of works for their organizations. Moreover, work commitment could bring other advantages. For instance, if an employee stays in an organization for a long period of time, he/she can undoubtedly get many promotions. As an obvious sample, we can consider a freshman who joins a company at the age of 20. After a few years, he or she can get a higher position and a more decent salary. This will lead to job satisfaction for lots of employees. On the other hand, those people who are in favor of working for different corporations believe that this attitude is extremely profitable for them. They claim that working for a variety of companies can be useful and employees can get a lot of positive experiences. Furthermore, working for various organizations can easily boost people's networks. It means that by working in different environments people can communicate to lots of new people and increase their social Communications. In conclusion, I personally believe that working for numerous organizations is much more beneficial for people.
The attitude of
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for
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has been at the center of a global concern over the last few decades. Although the majority of
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people
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work
for various
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organizations
during their
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, there are
still
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some
individuals who remain loyal to
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one
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organization
. The question,
however
, is whether
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people
should
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work
for
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different
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organizations
or
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only
one
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organization
. In this essay, I shall examine both
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of this argument.

First
and foremost, it is an undeniable fact that remaining loyal to an employer or a specific
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organization
has
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some
benefits.
For example
, if a person spends most of his/her
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working
life in a unique corporation, he/she will become master in that specific carrier.
Therefore
, these
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people
can handle a
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lot
of works for their
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organizations
.
Moreover
,
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work
commitment could bring other advantages.
For instance
, if an employee stays in an
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organization
for a long period of time, he/she can
undoubtedly
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get
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many
promotions. As an obvious sample, we can consider a freshman who
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joins
a
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company
at the age of 20. After a few years, he or she can
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get
a higher position and a more decent salary. This will lead to job satisfaction for
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lots
of employees.

On the other hand
, those
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people
who are in favor of
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working
for
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different
corporations believe that this attitude is
extremely
profitable for them. They claim that
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working
for a variety of
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companies
can be useful and employees can
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get
a
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lot
of
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positive
experiences.
Furthermore
,
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working
for various
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organizations
can
easily
boost
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people
's networks. It means that by
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working
in
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different
environments
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people
can communicate to
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lots
of new
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people
and increase their social Communications.

In conclusion
, I
personally
believe that
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working
for numerous
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organizations
is much more beneficial for
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people
.
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IELTS essay Some people work for the same organization all their working live. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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