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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work with different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.12

Some people prefer labouring in only one company from their early career until their retirement, while others believe that working for different organizations is a better experience. In my view, each option has its pros and cons, but in overall I think that it is better spend all working life on the same organization. In te first place, working in different organiations gives you the opportunity of experience diverse ways of performing the same task and getting to know new people. For example, I am a scientist nad some years ago I decided to work with an overseas research group. Although, they performed the same experiments that I used to do in former laboratory, some steps they did slightly different and obtained better results. Therefore, having contact with those people, allowed me to improve my skill. In addition, those people who I got to know there became my research colaborators. Nevertheless, when you start to work in a new organization, you have to adapt to the new rules and routine which is difficult for some people and take a long time. Next, working for the same company during all your career has a multitude of advantages, for instance you might accumulate benefits and achieve higher positions. People who labour more than for the organization are more likely to be promoted, since they bosses already know how good they are at work. Furthermore, some companies give longer vacation and better salaries to those who have been working for more time. In conclusion I believe that working for the same organization is better than working for different ones during your working life, since in a long run employees who stay longer in the same company have more advantages and are more likely to achieve more powered positions.
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have more advantages and are more likely to achieve more powered positions.
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IELTS essay some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
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