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Some people work for some organization all their working life others think it is better to change company pr organisation

Some people work for some organization all their working life others think it is better to change company pr organisation E33Ar
Task 2 In today’s competitive era, people prefer to work for some company throughout their life, whereas some people proclaim that it’s good to keep changing their wor king place. There are various facets of people who do not change job. First and foremost is, they are not resistance to change. some do not have ability to accept the changing surrounding environment. Addition to it, there some people who’s motive for earning is to accomplish basic necessity. Thus, they do not prefer to change the organization. secondly, lack of knowledge and experience in different aspects. Likewise, they do not have extra knowledge except in that particular area, as well as they are bad at experimenting new things. Lastly, having traditional belief. Like, if they will work for same organization, than chances for getting higher position is more. As, he is a loyal personnel towards company. On the other side, some argue that for the growth in career, it’s good to change a company whenever required. Moreover, this type of people keep themselves upgrading with the changing demand of the market. As one can see in this competitive market, it is better to change a job because one might get good knowledge and experience as well as chances for getting promotion increased. I firmly believe that, one should perform a job, which can help them to enhance their knowledge and experience through it. Also, people should try to perform it by being a loyal personnel. Thus, for the same, rather than adjusting in same place, change a organization. To sum up, both have their own pros and cons, so people should choose it wisely at the right time and at right place. thus, they will get the optimal income.
Task 2

In
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today
’s competitive era,
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people
prefer to work for
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some
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company
throughout their life, whereas
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some
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people
proclaim that it’s
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good
to
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keep
changing their
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wor king
place.

There are various facets of
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people
who do not
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change
job.
First
and foremost is, they are not resistance to
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change
.
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some
do not have ability to accept the changing surrounding environment. Addition to it, there
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some
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people
Did you mean "whose"?
who’s
motive for earning is to accomplish basic necessity.
Thus
, they do not prefer to
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change
the organization.
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secondly
, lack of
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knowledge
and experience in
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different
aspects.
Likewise
, they do not have extra
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knowledge
except in that particular area,
as well
as they are
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bad
at experimenting new things.
Lastly
, having traditional belief. Like, if they will work for same organization, than chances for getting higher position is more.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
, he is a loyal personnel towards
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company
.

On the other side,
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some
argue that for the growth in career, it’s
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good
to
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change
a
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company
whenever required.
Moreover
, this type of
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people
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keep
themselves upgrading with the changing demand of the market. As one can
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see
in this competitive market, it is better to
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change
a job
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because
one might
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get
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good
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knowledge
and experience
as well
as chances for getting promotion increased.

I
firmly
believe that, one should perform a job, which can
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help
them to enhance their
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knowledge
and experience through it.
Also
,
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people
should try to perform it by being a loyal personnel.
Thus
, for the same,
rather
than adjusting in same place,
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change
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
organization.

To sum up, both have their
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own
pros and cons,
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so
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people
should choose it
wisely
at the right time and at right place.
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thus
, they will
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get
the optimal income.
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IELTS essay Some people work for some organization all their working life others think it is better to change company pr organisation

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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