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Some people use the internet to take advice for their medical problems rather than seeing a doctor. Do the benefits outweigh the drawback of doing this?

Some people use the internet to take advice for their medical problems rather than seeing a doctor. Do the benefits outweigh the drawback of doing this? x0Q11
In recent years, technology and social media plays an essential role in many aspects of people’s daily life. Thus, a few individuals would rather search on the internet to get advice and solutions for their illness than go to the hospital. While I accept that this method could have some advantages, I believe that there are more likely to have negative impact in this issue. On the one hand, looking for medical advice online seems to be more convenient base on the benefits of time-consuming, like people could stay at home and just need a laptop with wifi connected. Besides that, getting free advice is also a profit, people could avoid wasting money when they don’t need professional doctors examined them. However, I would argue that to some extends, the drawbacks might exceed the advantages. Even though there are many online platforms which are developed about medical education, most of them have not been written by professional healthcare doctor. Hence, there is a risk of spreading wrong medical information, and their illness may inaccuracy diagnose. Moreover, if your symtoms is significant, then seeing doctor in hospital is absolutely a good decision, because professions could give patients better way to treat and enhance their health. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential harmful impact of this searching medical online is more significant than the benefit
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many
aspects of
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people
’s daily life.
Thus
, a few individuals would
rather
search on the internet to
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get
advice and solutions for their illness than go to the hospital. While I accept that this method could have
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some
advantages, I believe that there are more likely to have
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negative
impact in this issue.

On the one hand, looking for
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medical
advice online seems to be more convenient base on the benefits of time-consuming, like
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people
could stay at home and
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just
need a laptop with
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wifi
connected.
Besides
that, getting free advice is
also
a profit,
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people
could avoid wasting money when they don’t need professional doctors examined them.

However
, I would argue that to
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some
extends, the drawbacks might exceed the advantages.
Even though
there are
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many
online platforms which
are developed
about
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medical
education, most of them have not
been written
by professional healthcare doctor.
Hence
, there is a
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risk
of spreading
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wrong
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
information, and their illness may inaccuracy diagnose.
Moreover
, if your
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symtoms
is significant, then seeing doctor in hospital is
absolutely
a
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good
decision,
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because
professions could give patients better way to treat and enhance their health.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that the potential harmful impact of this searching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
online is more significant than the benefit
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IELTS essay Some people use the internet to take advice for their medical problems rather than seeing a doctor. Do the benefits outweigh the drawback of doing this?

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