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Some people today struggle to use modern electronic technology such as smartphones and computers. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem?

Some people today struggle to use modern electronic technology such as smartphones and computers. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem? MMA0L
It is an irrefutable fact that technology has booming at a rapid pace in all dimensions, especially in the electronics domain of smartphones and computers. In spite of such innovations in the smart peripherals sector many people still find it challenging to utilize the smart gadgets for their daily functions. There are many reasons behind this issue. Simultaneously, there are several ways to resolve this hindrance as well. In the below paragraphs, causes of this predicament along with solutions will be discussed. There are a plethora of factors that has made difficult for certain people to use smartphones and computers properly. To commence with, The main reason of this handicap is the rigid attitude of some individuals belonging to specific demographic of society. For example, old citizens do not want to change their ways of living their life, they repel new technology of any kind, and neither they want to learn or visit any training module to operate new gadgets. As a result, they remain dependent on their relatives for their necessities. Secondly, to operate a smart phone or computer some sort of basic education is required in the community. If there is no minimum level of education, a number of people can find it difficult to operate such items. There are many recommendations to mitigate issues related to handling of smart devices by a section. The first, companies manufacturing these instruments should conduct optional training on phone functions for people who shows interest in purchasing the device. For example, market survey reports demonstrate that training programs to users raises interest in the smart gadgets such as phones and computers, and further helps in maintaining the customer base. At the same time, consensus should be taken of entire market segment before initiating designing of new smart instruments. This helps in catering the requirements of the society, mainly of those, who are oblivious to new developments. Thus, people find the gadgets intriguing, inevitably multiplies the sale of the product. To conclude, by inferring from above paragraphs, one can form an opinion, some sections of people need to change their attitude towards and technology, and concurrently companies should also put in extra efforts to accommodate wants of a large population.
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especially
in the electronics domain of smartphones and computers.
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In spite of
such innovations in the
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smart
peripherals sector
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many
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people
still
find it challenging to utilize the
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smart
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gadgets
for their daily functions. There are
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many
reasons behind this issue.
Simultaneously
, there are several ways to resolve this hindrance
as well
. In the below paragraphs, causes of this predicament along with solutions will
be discussed
.

There are a plethora of factors that has made difficult for certain
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people
to
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use
smartphones and computers
properly
. To commence with, The main reason of this handicap is the rigid attitude of
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some
individuals belonging to specific demographic of society.
For example
,
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old
citizens do not want to
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change
their ways of living their life, they repel
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new
technology of any kind, and neither they want to learn or visit any training module to operate
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new
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gadgets
.
As a result
, they remain dependent on their relatives for their necessities.
Secondly
, to operate a
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smart
phone or computer
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some
sort of basic education
is required
in the community. If there is no minimum level of education, a number of
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people
can find it difficult to operate such items.

There are
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many
recommendations to mitigate issues related to handling of
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smart
devices by a section. The
first
,
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companies
manufacturing these instruments should conduct optional training on phone functions for
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people
who
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shows
interest in purchasing the device.
For example
, market survey reports demonstrate that training programs to users raises interest in the
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smart
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gadgets
such as phones and computers, and
further
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in maintaining the customer base. At the same time, consensus should
be taken
of entire market segment
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before
initiating designing of
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new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
instruments. This
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helps
in catering the requirements of the society,
mainly
of those, who are oblivious to
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new
developments.
Thus
,
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people
find the
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gadgets
intriguing,
inevitably
multiplies the sale of the product.

To conclude
, by inferring from above paragraphs, one can form an opinion,
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some
sections of
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people
need to
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change
their attitude towards and technology, and
concurrently
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companies
should
also
put in extra efforts to accommodate wants of a large population.
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IELTS essay Some people today struggle to use modern electronic technology such as smartphones and computers. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem?

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