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Some people think they should keep all the money they earn without paying taxes, others disagree. Discuss, what is your opinion? v.1

Some people think they should keep all the money they earn without paying taxes, others disagree. Discuss, what is your opinion? v. 1
Nowadays, cars have increased dramatically as some people find it easier to reach to their work and other places. This essay will analyse the sudden increase of the cars and what can we do to stop them. To begin with, cars benefited us in many ways. For example, before people used to take a bus or walk to reach their destination which takes longer time rather than using a car. Moreover, day by day the world is turning into a cosmopolitan country. Therefore, This cause deforestation and pollution. Unfortunately, Cars seed the major role causing the earth to be filled with carbon dioxide as all the transportation is filled with fossils which is made from dead plants and humans leading to pollutants, acid rain and an excessive crowd. However, there are several reasons to reduce from having a moving object in the road. Government can increase the price of the cars and build a subway. In addition, this will cause less crowds in the street and pollution. Moreover, the government should make the prices of the bus and railways less to encourage people. To conclude, stopping a human being to stop purchasing a car is obviously impossible as some would like to follow the trends of buying cars. Besides, administrations should take an action if they want to stop the earth from having contamination.
Nowadays,
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cars
have increased
dramatically
as
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some
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people
find it easier to reach to their work and other places. This essay will
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analyse
the sudden increase of the
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cars
and what can we do to
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stop
them.

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begin
with,
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cars
benefited us in
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many
ways.
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,
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before
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people
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used
to take a bus or walk to reach their destination which takes longer time
rather
than using a
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car
.
Moreover
, day by day the world is turning into a cosmopolitan country.
Therefore
, This cause deforestation and pollution. Unfortunately,
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Cars
seed the major role causing the earth to
be filled
with carbon dioxide as all the transportation
is filled
with fossils which
is made
from dead plants and humans leading to pollutants, acid rain and an excessive crowd.

However
, there are several reasons to
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reduce
from having a moving object in the road.
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Government
can increase the price of the
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cars
and build a subway.
In addition
, this will cause
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less
crowds in the street and pollution.
Moreover
, the
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government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the prices of the bus and railways less to encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

To conclude
, stopping a human being to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
purchasing a
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car
is
obviously
impossible as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
would like to follow the trends of buying
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cars
.
Besides
, administrations should take an action if they want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the earth from having contamination.
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IELTS essay Some people think they should keep all the money they earn without paying taxes, others disagree. Discuss, what is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
224 words
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7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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