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Some people think the media should not report details of crime to the public. What extent do you agree or disagree. v.4

Some people think the media should not report details of crime to the public. What extent v. 4
Since the beginning of the twenty first century, the role of the media has played a vital role to entertain, to inform and to educate the people. It is commonly believed that, thorough details of crimes should not be exposed to the public, as it can impact negatively to the society. However, I think that, explaining the crime details to the public makes people more aware to save themselves from wrongdoers. The reasons of my disinclination are explained in trailed paragraphs. To begin with, it is a well known fact that, prevention is always better than cure. To be specific, by exploring criminal reports, people can get to know about anti-social elements around them, which make them alert in advance. For example, locals can avoid the route, where the frequent robberies and stealing are happening. Additionally, they can learn how to protect themselves with their personal belongings by applying some preventing steps. For instance, cars should be parked under the light, which can prevent any car robbery. Moreover, victims can elaborate more precisely about how to deal with the situation and how to get out of it, which can be really beneficial for all the listeners. People must get to know about the very first step, taken after being cheated or harmed and it can be learned from the real incidents only. For instance, if someone's credit card is stolen, then the very first step he/she should take is to deactivate the card, so that all transactions could be prevented. These kinds of steps can be taught to the public with the help of the media. To conclude, media plays a vital role to educate the people by revealing the reality of the society. Thus, learning from others is definitely advantageous for all.
Since the beginning of the twenty
first
century, the role of the media has played a vital role to entertain, to inform and to educate the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. It is
commonly
believed that, thorough
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of crimes should not
be exposed
to the public, as it can impact
negatively
to the society.
However
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that, explaining the crime
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
to the public
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
more aware to save themselves from wrongdoers. The reasons of my disinclination are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
in trailed paragraphs.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, it is a well known fact that, prevention is always better than cure. To be specific, by exploring criminal reports,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know about anti-social elements around them, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them alert in advance.
For example
, locals can avoid the route, where the frequent robberies and stealing are happening.
Additionally
, they can learn how to protect themselves with their personal belongings by applying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
preventing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
steps
.
For instance
, cars should
be parked
under the light, which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
any car robbery.

Moreover
, victims can elaborate more
precisely
about how to deal with the situation and how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
out of it, which can be
really
beneficial for all the listeners.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
first
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step
, taken after
being cheated
or harmed and it can
be learned
from the real incidents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
.
For instance
, if someone's credit card
is stolen
, then the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
step
he/she should take is to deactivate the card,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that all transactions could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
. These kinds of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
steps
can
be taught
to the public with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of the media.

To conclude
, media plays a vital role to educate the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
by revealing the reality of the society.
Thus
, learning from others is definitely advantageous for all.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the media should not report details of crime to the public. What extent v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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