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Some people think the machine makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think the machine makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. WR3q
- Nowadays, machines become a necessity for all big companies and industries, without them they are nothing. Besides, individuals opine that life is becoming complicated because of non-living appliances. So, we shall rid of the machines, make life reasonable. However, I believe that there is one saying that ‘every coin has two sides’ so machines are relatable to this and also have pros and cons. . I’ll discuss both standpoints in the subsequent paragraphs. - Firstly, in the contemporary world, machines are using in an optimum way owing to this is speed accuracy. For instance, the machine does faster work than human beings as well as gives more privileges to the gigantic companies such as do more work in less time. Consequently, gives more production and industries get more profit. Moreover, companies and industries are owning the machine to accomplish their desires. - On the other hand, the maximum usage of machines directly affect the country like the rise of unemployment. In the other words, people have to face the dearth of scarcity and money because of this people persuades themselves in the wrong direction. Another disadvantage of using machines are quite costly. If machines spoil then, industries have to tolerate the high expenditures for rebuilding the machines. - To sum up, companies have to use both ways for development and use them in a duly manner, don't use the machine recklessly.
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Nowadays,
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machines
become a necessity for all
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big
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and
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, without them they are nothing.
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, individuals opine that life is becoming complicated
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because
of non-living appliances.
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, we shall
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rid
of the
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machines
,
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make
life reasonable.
However
, I believe that there is one saying that ‘every coin has two sides’
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so
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machines
are relatable to this and
also
have pros and cons.
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I’ll discuss both standpoints in the subsequent paragraphs.

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Firstly
, in the contemporary world,
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machines
are using
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in an optimum way
owing to this
is speed
accuracy.
For instance
, the
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machine
does faster work than human beings
as well
as gives more privileges to the gigantic
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companies
such as do more work in less time.
Consequently
, gives more production and
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industries
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get
more profit.
Moreover
,
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companies
and
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industries
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are owning
the
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machine
to accomplish their desires.

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On the other hand
, the maximum usage of
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machines
directly
affect the country like the rise of unemployment. In the other words,
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people
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have to
face the dearth of scarcity and money
because of this
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people
persuades themselves in the
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wrong
direction. Another disadvantage of using
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machines
are quite costly. If
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machines
spoil then,
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industries
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have to
tolerate the high expenditures for rebuilding the machines.

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To sum up,
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companies
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have to
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use
both ways for development and
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use
them in a
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duly manner
, don't
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use
the
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machine
recklessly
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IELTS essay Some people think the machine makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology.

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