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Some people think the government should act to decide how people live in order to make a healthier life. Others think individuals should decide their own lifestyle.what do you concern about? discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people think the government should act to decide how people live in order to make a healthier life. Others think individuals should decide their own lifestyle. what do you concern about? discuss both views and give your opinion mWOmr
There is no doubt that the secret of staying healthy is following a healthy lifestyle. While some people believe that it is the government 's responsibility to ensure that their citizens stay healthy, others argue that it is the responsibility of concerned individuals. In this essay, I will look into both sides of the argument and give my ideas in the paragraphs below. On the one hand, it is possible to say that the government plays an essential role to ensure the well being of their inhabitants. First and foremost, the government can support and motivate individuals to pursue a healthy lifestyle by imposing heavy taxes on unhealthy food or subsidizing healthy food. More specifically, the Vietnamese government has introduced a policy to encourage people to do exercises at home to protect their health and fight the covid-19 epidemic and the Sweden government also offers subsidized healthy food to encourage their citizens. Secondly, the government can reduce the number of cases of heart attacks, obesity and cancer. For instance, the Us is one of 10 countries with the highest proportion of overweight people in the world due to eating a huge amount of fast food. As a consequence, if the American government finds a way to limit people from eating fast food, their health will improve and also reduce the number of people who die from disease. Furthermore, staying healthy is a valuable remedy to help humans prolong their life. On the other hand, individuals should be made responsible and accountable for their health because I believe that although the government encourages people to live healthy, they themselves are not aware of the benefits of that and do not anticipate the consequences if they do not stay healthy, the initiative from the government will either be ineffective or bear very less effect. In other words, when individuals do not consider a healthy lifestyle as their priority and do not even appreciate the fact that following a healthy lifestyle makes them feel better, they will still live their own way of life. In conclusion, the responsibility of following a healthy lifestyle should rest on individuals, while the government supports and motivates them.
There is no doubt that the secret of staying
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healthy
is following a
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healthy
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lifestyle
. While
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some
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people
believe that it is the
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government
's responsibility to ensure that their citizens stay
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healthy
, others argue that it is the responsibility of concerned
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individuals
. In this essay, I will look into both sides of the argument and give my
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ideas
in the paragraphs below.

On the one hand, it is possible to say that the
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government
plays an essential role to ensure the
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well being
of their inhabitants.
First
and foremost, the
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government
can support and motivate
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individuals
to pursue a
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healthy
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lifestyle
by imposing heavy taxes on unhealthy
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food
or subsidizing
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healthy
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food
. More
specifically
, the Vietnamese
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government
has introduced a policy to encourage
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people
to do exercises at home to protect their health and fight the
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covid-19
epidemic and the Sweden
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government
also
offers subsidized
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healthy
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food
to encourage their citizens.
Secondly
, the
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government
can
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reduce
the number of cases of heart attacks, obesity and cancer.
For instance
,
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the Us
is one of 10 countries with the highest proportion of overweight
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people
in the world due to eating a huge amount of
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fast
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food
. As a consequence, if the American
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government
finds a way to limit
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people
from eating
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fast
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food
, their health will
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improve
and
also
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reduce
the number of
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people
who
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die
from disease.
Furthermore
, staying
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healthy
is a valuable remedy to
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help
humans prolong their life.

On the other hand
,
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individuals
should
be made
responsible and accountable for their health
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because
I believe that although the
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government
encourages
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people
to
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live
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healthy
, they themselves are not aware of the benefits of that and do not anticipate the consequences if they do not stay
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healthy
, the initiative from the
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government
will either be ineffective or bear
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very
less effect.
In other words
, when
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individuals
do not consider a
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healthy
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lifestyle
as their priority and do not even appreciate the fact that following a
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healthy
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lifestyle
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makes
them feel better, they will
still
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live
their
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own
way of life.

In conclusion
, the responsibility of following a
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healthy
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lifestyle
should rest on
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individuals
, while the
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government
supports and motivates them.
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IELTS essay Some people think the government should act to decide how people live in order to make a healthier life. Others think individuals should decide their own lifestyle. what do you concern about? discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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