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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. v.6

Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. v. 6
Nowadays, travelling by plane is more and more acquainted with people than in the past. Besides expensive airlines, there are some low-cost airlines. Someone thinks that cheap air arrival should be banned, however, others think low-cost carriers bring many advantages. On the on hand, cheap flight cannot be denied that is more and more popular, especially for the middle class. First of all, there are many people who feel compassion for buying air ticket because of the expensive thus low-cost trip is the greatest choice. People can save their money and time by using cheaper shuttle. Students have more changes to go aboard to study and it only takes them a few hours to go there. Secondly, the tourism industry is able to develop thus modern people enormously enjoy air travel every day. Therefore, based on aviation, many jobs can be created to tackle the unemployment in this local. On the contrary, cheap flight sometimes cannot guarantee safety and service. Firstly, in low-cost flight, there are more seats so if there is an accident that forced to make an emergency landing, it will be difficult to escape. Besides, the service is not very good and you have to spend money on buying foods and drinks on planes. On top of that, the top concern is the emission from the airplane, each day that causes pollution to the environment. The aircraft exhaust emits a huge amount of carbon dioxide, which is the main aspect of the greenhouse effect. To my point of view, cheap shuttle can open the opportunities for middle class and poor to have more changes to go aboard. However, low-cost flight still exists some inadequacies for people and the environment. In conclusion, although low-cost flight has some disadvantages, it should not be prohibited due to the utilities for people.
Nowadays, travelling by
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plane
is more and more acquainted with
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people
than in the past.
Besides
expensive airlines, there are
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some
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low-cost
airlines. Someone
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thinks
that
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cheap
air arrival should
be banned
,
however
, others
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think
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low-cost
carriers bring
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many
advantages.

On the on hand,
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cheap
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flight
cannot
be denied
that is
more and more popular,
especially
for the middle
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class
.
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First of all
, there are
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many
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people
who feel compassion for buying air ticket
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because
of the expensive
thus
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low-cost
trip is the greatest choice.
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People
can save their money and time by using cheaper shuttle. Students have more
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changes
to go aboard to study and it
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only
takes them a few hours to go there.
Secondly
, the tourism industry is able to develop
thus
modern
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people
enormously
enjoy air travel every day.
Therefore
, based on aviation,
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many
jobs can
be created
to tackle the unemployment in this local.

On the contrary
,
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cheap
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flight
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sometimes
cannot guarantee safety and service.
Firstly
, in
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low-cost
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flight
, there are more seats
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so
if there is an accident that forced to
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make
an emergency landing, it will be difficult to escape.
Besides
, the service is not
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very
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good
and you
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have to
spend money on buying foods and drinks on
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planes
.
On top of that
, the top concern is the emission from the airplane, each day that causes pollution to the environment. The aircraft exhaust emits a huge amount of carbon dioxide, which is the main aspect of the greenhouse effect.

To my point of view,
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cheap
shuttle can open the opportunities for middle
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class
and poor to have more
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changes
to go aboard.
However
,
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low-cost
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flight
still
exists
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some
inadequacies for
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people
and the environment.
In conclusion
, although
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low-cost
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flight
has
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some
disadvantages, it should not
be prohibited
due to the utilities for
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people
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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