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Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. Do you agree or disagree? Include relevant examples from your own experience

Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. Include relevant examples from your own experience v. 6

Employees give their best when they are motivated. Some people feel that offering them salaries commensurate with the revenue they generate for the organization is the best way to enhance their productivity. I completely agree with this view. Money motivates most people and it is not surprising. Financial security is crucial for all employees. Therefore, it makes perfect sense for organizations to come up with a pay package that compensates employees adequately for their performance. If employees are offered fixed salaries, they have no real reason to put in their best effort because their contribution has no real impact on their salary. On the other hand, if the company offers higher remunerations to employees who close more deals or generate more revenue, all employees will be motivated to work harder. This, in turn, will enhance the revenues of the organization. For example, my management promised me a promotion and a higher salary on the successful closure of a million dollar deal with one of our esteemed clients. Since I always wanted to see myself as a manager this offer motivated me to work hard and this resulted in the closure of the deal within six months. Several organizations are already experimenting with this practice. In addition to a fixed salary, they offer their employees a commission on every sale they complete. To conclude, the performance of an employee is closely related to their level of motivation. Motivated employees work harder and contribute more to the bottom line of an organization. Since money is what motivates most people, paying employees on the basis of their contribution makes perfect sense.

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agree
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employees
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employees
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organization
. For example
, my management promised me a promotion and a higher You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwagefeepaystipendearningsincome
salary
 on the successful closure of a million dollar deal with one of our esteemed clients. Since I always wanted to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 myself as a manager this offer You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpromptinspirepropelswayexcitedrive
motivated
 me to work This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 and this resulted in the closure of the deal within six months. Several You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanagementgroupinginstitutionsystem
organizations
 are already experimenting with this practice. In addition
 to a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :rectified
fixed
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salary
, they offer their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmemberlaborerclerkworkeragentrepresentative
employees
 a commission on every sale they complete.

To conclude
, the performance of an You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmemberlaborerclerkworkeragentrepresentative
employee
 is closely
 related to their level of motivation. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpromptinspirepropelswayexcitedrive
Motivated
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employees
 work harder and contribute more to the bottom line of an You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanagementgroupinginstitutionsystem
organization
. Since money is what motivates most This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
, paying You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmemberlaborerclerkworkeragentrepresentative
employees
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makes
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