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Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. Do you agree or disagree? Include relevant examples from your own experience. v.2

Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. Include relevant examples from your own experience. v. 2
It is being argued by some that paying employees based on productivity is the ultimate means of inspiring hard work. I disagree this is the best way, owing to the fact that it creates unethical behaviour amongst other things. Salary review, reward and recognition scheme as well as career development in my opinion are better ways of motivating employees to work hard. To start with, employees will put in effort to achieve great productivity when they are aware of a career development plan in place to ensure a long term sustainability rather than instant gratification such as sales bonus. This creates a win-win situation, they will work hard to ensure the business suceeds knowing their development is dependent on it. In addition, having a periodic salary review based on set performance index will encourage people to work hard in anticipation of salary increment. Furthermore, another way to drive productivity is having a scheme that takes into cognizance employees welfare such as healthcare, transportation, insurance plan, annual leave and so on; thus creating a sense of belonging and stimulating diligence. For example, I have a health insurance scheme and I am assured I can access healthcare services as and when due. Another point to note is that hard work can be triggered by having a reward and recognition program that acknowledges good performance. For example, a 'wall of fame' for outstanding employees will encourage people as everybody loves to be celebrated. In conclusion, admittedly, having payment equivalent to productivity is one way of  influencing hard work, however, I disagree it is the best way because it is short termed and results in sharp practises. Hence, long term incentive plan such as annual salary review, reward and recognition and career development are better means of motivating and encourage hard work in a workplace.
It is
being argued
by
some
that paying
employees
based on
productivity
is the ultimate means of inspiring
hard
work
. I disagree this is the best way, owing to the fact that it creates unethical
behaviour
amongst other things.
Salary
review, reward and recognition scheme
as well
as career
development
in my opinion are better ways of motivating
employees
to
work
hard
.

To
start
with,
employees
will put in effort to achieve great
productivity
when they are aware of a career
development
plan in place to ensure a long term sustainability
rather
than instant gratification such as sales bonus. This creates a win-win situation, they will
work
hard
to ensure the business
suceeds
knowing their
development
is dependent on it.
In addition
,
having
a periodic
salary
review based on set performance index will encourage
people
to
work
hard
in anticipation of
salary
increment.

Furthermore
, another way to drive
productivity
is
having
a scheme that takes into cognizance
employees
welfare such as healthcare, transportation, insurance plan, annual
leave
and
so
on;
thus
creating a sense of belonging and stimulating diligence.
For example
, I have a health insurance
scheme and
I
am assured
I can access healthcare services as and when due. Another point to note is that
hard
work
can
be triggered
by
having
a reward and recognition program that acknowledges
good
performance.
For example
, a 'wall of fame' for outstanding
employees
will encourage
people
as everybody
loves
to
be celebrated
.

In conclusion
,
admittedly
,
having
payment equivalent to
productivity
is one way of
 
influencing
hard
work
,
however
, I disagree it is the best way
because
it is short termed and results in sharp
practises
.
Hence
, long term incentive plan such as annual
salary
review, reward and recognition and career
development
are better means of motivating and encourage
hard
work
in a workplace.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. Include relevant examples from your own experience. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
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