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Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is pay them based on how much they produce and sell do you agree or disagree and give your opinion?

Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is pay them based on how much they produce and sell and give your opinion? P9Lj
One of the responsibilities of a manager is to motivate their employees to do more hard work. However, some people agree that it would be a right way to give salaries to an employee on their performance. This essay will discuss why people think in that way and why I disagree with these people, all the explanation is given in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, many people think that paying wages to workers on their performance would be an effective way. It may be increase a worker's performance and they worked hard to archive more salaries. Ultimately, it improves the company's performance, sales, and profits. Google, for example, changed their policies for their employees, if employees do more to improve in their sales, they will give them an extra 25% of the money as a bonus on income to their employees in last year. Over 254 employees gained more wages after changes in policies. These types of evidence prove that why people think in this way and it will improve the overall performance of employees and profits of the company. However, it would be not an effective way to basing wages on a worker's production and sales. In some cases, the performance of workers affected by external factors beyond their control such as the economy of the state, natural problems and political developments. Heavy rain, for example, damages all produced different vegetables on the farm, these types of cases, people not involves in a decrement of productions. Therefore, basing salaries figures on the overall performance, not a good idea. In most cases, it would demotivate the employees. To conclude, it is ultimately the manager's responsibilities to motivate their workers to improve their performance and provide them with more wages than measuring on worker’s sales. In my words, I totally disagree with the given statement. It would be not a relatively effective way, which may lead to unexpected outcomes.
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employees
to do more
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hard
work.
However
,
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some
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people
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agree
that it would be a right way to give salaries to an
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employee
on their
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performance
. This essay will discuss why
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people
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think
in that way and why I disagree with these
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people
, all the explanation is
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given
in the following paragraphs.

First
and foremost,
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many
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people
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think
that paying wages to
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workers
on their
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performance
would be an effective way. It may be increase a worker's
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performance and
they worked
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hard
to archive more salaries.
Ultimately
, it
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improves
the
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company
's
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performance
,
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sales
, and profits. Google,
for example
,
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changed
their policies for their
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employees
, if
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employees
do more to
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improve
in their
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sales
, they will give them an extra 25% of the money as a bonus on income to their
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employees
in last year. Over 254
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employees
gained more wages after
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changes
in policies. These types of evidence prove that why
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people
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think
in this way and it will
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improve
the
overall
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performance
of
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employees
and profits of the
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company
.

However
, it would be not an effective way to basing wages on a worker's production and
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sales
. In
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some
cases, the
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performance
of
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workers
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affected
by external factors beyond their control such as the economy of the state, natural problems and political developments. Heavy rain,
for example
, damages all produced
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different
vegetables on the farm, these types of cases,
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people
not involves in a decrement of productions.
Therefore
, basing salaries figures on the
overall
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performance
, not a
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good
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idea
.
In most cases
, it would demotivate the employees.

To conclude
, it is
ultimately
the manager's responsibilities to motivate their
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workers
to
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improve
their
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performance
and provide them with more wages than measuring on
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worker’s
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sales
. In my words, I
totally
disagree with the
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given
statement. It would be not a
relatively
effective way, which may lead to unexpected outcomes.
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IELTS essay Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is pay them based on how much they produce and sell and give your opinion?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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