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Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem? 78P2
In this day and age, despite being released from prison, due to committing a crime, prisoners are sentenced to prison again. This essay will have a look at some serious problems associated with committing a crime after releasing suggest some preventative measures that could be taken to cope with this problem. One of the main causes of the issue is that people who commit a crime usually have no other way of making a living. That is to say, when many offenders have been punished and released, many employers do not want to engage criminals to their work, which can be negative effect to thieves. This is because, this issue forces criminals to commit petty crimes such as shoplifting, pickpocketing and even kidnapping because of unemployment. The solution is that the government is not to ignore offenders when they are released from prison. They should create jobs for them and offenders must have been employed after releasing, and consequently they may not commit these crimes. Another problem is that many offenders mix with other prisoners who can be a negative influence. Which means is that there might be some burglars who committed a petty crime like pickpocketing or speeding, and if they are sentenced to prison, they can meet with some criminals who commit some huge crimes such as robber, smuggler or even murder. It is because, they can make a relationship and commit a crime with them after releasing from prison. To tackle the problem, these types of crime can be deterred by undergoing community service or paying a fine. These types of ways of punishing can be less expensive and more productive measures. As a result, they may not commit a crime. To conclude, after having been punished the criminals commit a crime again, due to reasons such as unemployment and mixing with criminals. This is a serious problem, and unless we can get a solution to solve this problem, criminals may not to stop doing harsh crimes.
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being released
from
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prison
, due to committing a
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crime
, prisoners
are sentenced
to
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prison
again. This essay will have a look at
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some
serious
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problems
associated with committing a
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crime
after releasing suggest
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some
preventative measures that could
be taken
to cope with this problem.

One of the main causes of the issue is that
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people
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who
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commit
a
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crime
usually
have no other way of making a living.
That is
to say, when
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many
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offenders
have
been punished
and released,
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many
employers do not want to engage
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criminals
to their work, which can be
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negative
effect to thieves. This is
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because
, this issue forces
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criminals
to
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commit
petty
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crimes
such as shoplifting,
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pickpocketing
and even kidnapping
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because
of unemployment. The solution is that the
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government
is not to
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ignore
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offenders
when they
are released
from
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prison
. They should create jobs for them and
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offenders
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must
have
been employed
after releasing, and
consequently
they may not
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commit
these crimes.

Another
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problem
is that
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many
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offenders
mix with other prisoners
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who
can be a
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negative
influence. Which means is that there might be
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some
burglars
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who
committed a petty
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crime
like
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pickpocketing
or speeding, and if they
are sentenced
to
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prison
, they can
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meet
with
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some
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criminals
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who
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commit
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some
huge
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crimes
such as robber, smuggler or even murder. It is
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because
, they can
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make
a relationship and
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commit
a
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crime
with them after releasing from
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prison
. To tackle the
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problem
, these types of
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crime
can
be deterred
by undergoing community service or paying a fine. These types of ways of punishing can be less expensive and more productive measures.
As a result
, they may not
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commit
a crime.

To conclude
, after having
been punished
the
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criminals
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commit
a
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crime
again, due to reasons such as unemployment and mixing with
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criminals
. This is a serious
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problem
, and unless we can
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get
a solution to solve this
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problem
,
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criminals
may not to
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stop
doing harsh
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crimes
.
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IELTS essay Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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330 words
6.0
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