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Some people think that work is the most important thing on the people life

Some people think that work is the most important thing on the people life RkL6M
A great author said that “The lack of money is the root of all evil” if you have enough money then you don’t have a successful carrier then you don’t have enough to live a good life. Some people argue that without a successful carrier life is not fully completed. I today agree with the above statement. In today’s world people required more things than their necessity. As the necessity has increased one would require more money to fullfed all the requirement of the family. A survey was conducted in a company and people who earn good life a happier life. And we also need money to run a family. If we have a good earning you will never face a financial problem. And if you have successfully carrier you have a great respect both in family and society. To achieve something in life a person should love his job, recent studies have shown that the people to work in IT industry only work to get the salary they don’t love the job. This kind of job will lead to stress and depression. One should always love their job they only they will achieve something in the carrier and people will also feel motivated and they will be good at the job. In my opinion, I 100 percent agree that people having a good pay and job satisfaction will result in a good life and successful carrier. Those who have not achieve job satisfaction will never become successful in their life.
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then you don’t have a
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argue that without a
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is not
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’s world
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required more things than their necessity.
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the necessity has increased one would require more
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all the requirement of the family.

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who earn
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a happier
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. And we
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need
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to run a family.
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we have a
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earning you will never face a financial problem. And if you have
successfully
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carrier
you have a great respect both in family and society.

To achieve something in
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a person should
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his
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, recent studies have shown that the
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to work in IT industry
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work to
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the salary they don’t
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. This kind of
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will lead to
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and depression. One should always
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they
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they will achieve something in the
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motivated and
they will be
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at the job
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having a
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satisfaction will result in a
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life
and
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. Those who have not
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achieve
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satisfaction will never become
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IELTS essay Some people think that work is the most important thing on the people life

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
251 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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