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Some people think that women should play an equally role as men in a counry police force or military force. Discuss both views.

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No doubt, women play an integral role in the world. A few indivuals think that female can performe the jobs of police and military force as equally as men. Nevertheless, some people think that these kinds of jobs are not for women. However, I will discuss both views in upcoming peragraphs. To begin with, there are many reason why female should do these kind of jobs. First and foremost reason is that Nowadays, women are successfull in every field such as science, politicsand education that can proves for example, there many womens who wins award in different sectors such as kalpana chawla as an astrologer Indhra gandhi as an politician. that proves that women can do every work if they set their goal. so it is pointless to say that women can not do these kinds of jobs. On the other hand, Indivuals think that women have less physical ability as compared to men. They think that women may have difficulty engaging in strenous activity which can be exhausting ever for men, while the women are senstive and not very strong for heart. They are not able to take strict action against the criminals. so these kind of jobs are not for women. I beleive in the former side and i think that everyone have a equall rights, so everyone can not judge. it depends on the person chioces. if women get chance to do jobs in police, they are trained equally as men as women, so they are physically, and mentally strong. To conclude, from my point of view, because of some relgious restrions and specific abilities they have, government must give a similar fortune to women working as a mitilant or police officers, also it is helpfull to fall the rate of female foticide
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play an integral role in the world. A few
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indivuals
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think
that female can
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performe
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jobs
of police and military force as
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equally as
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men
.
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,
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some
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people
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think
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kinds
of
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jobs
are not for
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women
.
However
, I will discuss both views in upcoming
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peragraphs
. To
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begin
with, there are
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many
reason why female should do these
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kind
of
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jobs
.
First
and foremost reason is that Nowadays,
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women
are
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successfull
in every field such as science,
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politicsand
education that can proves
for example
, there
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many
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womens
who wins award in
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different
sectors such as
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kalpana
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chawla
as an astrologer
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Indhra
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gandhi
as
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an
politician.
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that
proves that
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women
can do every work if they set their goal.
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so
it is pointless to say that
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women
can not do these
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kinds
of
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jobs
.
On the other hand
,
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Indivuals
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think
that
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women
have less physical ability as compared to
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men
. They
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think
that
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women
may have difficulty engaging in
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strenous
activity which can be exhausting ever for
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men
, while the
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women
are
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senstive
and not
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very
strong for heart. They are not able to take strict action against the criminals.
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so
these
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kind
of
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jobs
are not for
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women
. I
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beleive
in the former side and
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i
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that everyone have
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a
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equall
rights,
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everyone can not judge.
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depends on the person
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chioces
.
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if
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women
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chance to do
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jobs
in police, they
are trained
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men
as
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women
,
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so
they are
physically
, and mentally strong.
To conclude
, from my point of view,
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of
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some
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relgious
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restrions
and specific abilities they have,
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government
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must
give a similar fortune to
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women
working as a
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mitilant
or police officers,
also
it is
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helpfull
to fall the rate of female
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foticide
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IELTS essay Some people think that women should play an equally role as men in a counry police force or military force.

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