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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.

Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. 3Bdd
There is an opinion asserting that people who travels to new communities which have specific rites and rituals are obliged to respect to mentioned circumstances. I completely disagree with this statement on the basis of development of communication systems and necessity of respect to fatherland culture. To begin with, the main reason that communication gadgets like mobile phones have been spread around the world and these innovative tools compose a general culture with lots of subscriptions that it's caused newcomers and domestic dwellers have not fundamental problems. Having said that, however, expansion of society's relevance not the only reason in this respect. Another factor to confirm my opposition is that have not to adjust their behaviors to local traditions. By the way these differences create a strong correlation between society's customs. To sum up, I personally take the view that it is unacceptable to forcing someone to do something who might don’t like. This is mainly communication tools close our cultures together and peoples cultures are most familiar to each other. On the other hand, existence of these cultural differences should not be reason to forget our fatherlands rites and rituals.
There is an opinion asserting that
people
who
travels
to new communities which have specific rites and rituals
are obliged
to respect to mentioned circumstances. I completely disagree with this statement on the basis of development of communication systems and necessity of respect to fatherland culture.

To
begin
with, the main reason that communication gadgets like mobile phones have
been spread
around the world and these innovative tools compose a general culture with lots of subscriptions that it's caused newcomers and domestic dwellers have not fundamental problems.

Having said that,
however
, expansion of society's relevance not the
only
reason in this respect. Another factor to confirm my opposition is that have not to adjust their behaviors to local traditions. By the way these differences create a strong correlation between society's customs.

To sum up, I
personally
take the view that it is unacceptable to
forcing
someone to do something who might don’t like. This is
mainly
communication tools close our cultures together and peoples cultures are most familiar to each other.
On the other hand
, existence of these cultural differences should not be reason to forget our fatherlands rites and rituals.
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IELTS essay Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.

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