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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.

Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. V23m
According to some people, when we visit a foreign country we should accept /embrace its customs and practices. In my opinion, it is all right to adapt to another culture; however, it should not be at the expense of our own culture. / In my opinion, one should only accept those elements of the foreign culture which one finds acceptable /comfortable with. While visiting foreign countries or living abroad, one should try to embrace the foreign style of dressing, food habits and other practices only if one finds them pleasant to follow. There is no point in doing something just to fit in. However, before visiting a foreign country it is important to acquire a thorough understanding of their symbols, gestures and heritage to avoid causing offence. The acceptance of another culture and lifestyle symbolizes respect for the new community and promotes healthy human relations. For instance, candidates running for American President often talk about their admiration for Indian culture to win the vote of Indian Diaspora living in America. That is because as human beings we automatically develop a liking for those who respect our culture and values. Hence, regard for another culture goes a long way in forming long-lasting connections between people of different race and ethnicity. Although an individual should be appreciative of the practice of the country he visits, they should not be compelled to give up their own customs. Every region has their own religious beliefs and way of living and people should have the freedom to choose the best lifestyle for themselves. This also ensures harmony among the various ethnicities living together. For instance, India is a country of many religious groups preaching their own teachings and language. In such a country, the peaceful environment is maintained by giving everyone the right to select their way of life. In conclusion, it is a good way of showing acceptance and affection towards others by following their rituals and ideology but it needs to be an option, not an obligation for visitors to comply with. Affection and harmony can only prosper when everyone shows respect for each other’s traditions voluntarily by choice.
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some
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people
, when we visit a
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foreign
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country
we should accept /embrace its customs and practices. In my opinion, it is all right to adapt to another
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culture
;
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, it should not be at the expense of our
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own
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culture
. / In my opinion, one should
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only
accept those elements of the
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foreign
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culture
which one finds acceptable /comfortable with.

While visiting
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foreign
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countries
or
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living
abroad, one should try to embrace the
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foreign
style of dressing, food habits and other practices
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only
if one finds them pleasant to follow. There is no point in doing something
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just
to fit in.
However
,
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before
visiting a
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foreign
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country
it is
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important
to acquire a thorough understanding of their symbols, gestures and heritage to avoid causing
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offence
.

The acceptance of another
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culture
and lifestyle symbolizes respect for the new community and promotes healthy human relations.
For instance
, candidates running for American President
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often
talk about their admiration for Indian
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culture
to win the vote of Indian Diaspora
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living
in America.
That is
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because
as human beings we
automatically
develop a liking for those who respect our
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culture
and values.
Hence
, regard for another
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culture
goes a long way in forming long-lasting connections between
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people
of
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different
race and ethnicity.

Although an individual should be appreciative of the practice of the
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country
he visits, they should not
be compelled
to give up their
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own
customs. Every region has
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their
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own
religious beliefs and way of
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living
and
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people
should have the freedom to choose the best lifestyle for themselves. This
also
ensures harmony among the various ethnicities
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living
together.
For instance
, India is a
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country
of
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many
religious groups preaching their
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own
teachings and language. In such a
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country
, the peaceful environment
is maintained
by giving everyone the right to select their way of life.

In conclusion
, it is a
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good
way of showing acceptance and affection towards others by following their rituals and ideology
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but
it needs to be an option, not an obligation for visitors to comply with. Affection and harmony can
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only
prosper when everyone
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shows
respect for each other’s traditions
voluntarily
by choice.
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IELTS essay Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
356 words
6.5
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