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Some people think that we need to pay higher taxes in order for the government to build basic needs of people Others say that government should find other ways to get funds for it What should the government do in your opinion v.2

Some people think that we need to pay higher taxes in order for the government to build basic needs of people Others say that government should find other ways to get funds for it What should the government do in your opinion v. 2
The ultimate goal of modern governments is to ensure the rapid progress and safety of their nations. Presently, some people reckon that paying higher taxes is salient to strengthen the financial budget of government so that it can cater all the basic needs of masses. By contrast, others cite that administration should look for other ways to accumulate funds. Here, i would like to account for both sides with my own perception. There are manifold points to shore up the former view. First and foremost, heavy levy received from public can contribute remarkably to maximize the financial budget of a nation for its betterment. Government of a nation can easily manage the astronomical outlays of transportation, education, health and other sectors. Taking a real life example into consideration, recently, Indian governments has passed out the act of goods service tax known as (GST) in order to boost the financial budget. Funds collected from (GST) and income taxes are supposed to be utilized for the welfare of common people in terms of accommodation, transport, education and medical amenities. Needless to say, the role of surplus taxes to accelerate the rate of development is terrific. On the contrary, others have conflicting views. They think that inflation has already got on nerves of people in this modern context especially in thriving nations. Therefore, imposition of heavy tax is expected to be backbreaking for common people as they could find it onerous to manage their living expenses. What is more, government of developing nations should invite international companies to set up their branches so that import and export, commercial dealings and employment opportunities could be availed for financial prosperity. It is advisable to make strategies and policies to hike the productivity of workings sectors such as industries, agriculture instead forcing people to pay higher levy. In my notion, both aspects have their own significance. Undeniable, public funds are a major source of revenue. However, middle and low class people are likely to live miserable lives under this approach and this is highly unjustifiable. Administration needs to promote commercialization, import and export, ways to enhance productivity instead taxing immensely. To recapitulate, collection of funds is a big deal for governments worldwide. Charging heavy taxes is not the only way to strengthen the budget; governments should explore other alternatives.
The ultimate goal of modern
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governments
is to ensure the rapid progress and safety of their
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nations
.
Presently
,
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some
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people
reckon that paying higher
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taxes
is salient to strengthen the
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financial
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budget
of
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government
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so
that it can cater all the basic needs of masses. By contrast, others cite that administration should look for
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other
ways to accumulate funds. Here,
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i
would like to account for both sides with my
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own
perception.

There are manifold points to shore up the former view.
First
and foremost, heavy levy received from public can contribute
remarkably
to maximize the
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financial
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budget
of a
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nation
for its betterment.
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Government
of a
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nation
can
easily
manage the astronomical outlays of transportation, education, health and
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other
sectors. Taking a real life example into consideration, recently, Indian
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governments
has passed out the act of
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goods
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service
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tax
known as (GST) in order to boost the
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financial
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budget
. Funds collected from (GST) and income
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taxes
are supposed
to
be utilized
for the welfare of common
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people
in terms of accommodation, transport, education and medical amenities. Needless to say, the role of surplus
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taxes
to accelerate the rate of development is terrific.
On the contrary
, others have conflicting views.

They
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think
that inflation has already
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got
on nerves of
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people
in this modern context
especially
in thriving
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nations
.
Therefore
, imposition of heavy
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tax
is
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expected
to be backbreaking for common
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people
as they could find it onerous to manage their living expenses.
What is more
,
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government
of developing
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nations
should invite international
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companies
to set up their branches
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so
that import and export, commercial dealings and employment opportunities could
be availed
for
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financial
prosperity. It is advisable to
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make
strategies and policies to hike the productivity of workings sectors such as industries, agriculture
instead
forcing
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people
to pay higher levy.

In my notion, both aspects have their
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own
significance. Undeniable, public funds are a major source of revenue.
However
, middle and low
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class
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people
are likely to
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live
miserable
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lives
under this approach and this is
highly
unjustifiable. Administration needs to promote commercialization, import and export, ways to enhance productivity
instead
taxing
immensely
.

To recapitulate, collection of funds is a
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big
deal for
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governments
worldwide. Charging heavy
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taxes
is not the
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only
way to strengthen the
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budget
;
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governments
should explore
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other
alternatives.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that we need to pay higher taxes in order for the government to build basic needs of people Others say that government should find other ways to get funds for it What should the government do in your opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
383 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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